What if Edward hadn't stopped the van?

October 27, 2009
By Anawithonen BRONZE, Inglewood, California
Anawithonen BRONZE, Inglewood, California
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Favorite Quote:
"if i could give her a big does of 'be nice' then we'd all live happily ever after." -Stevie Rae, Chosen.


I was standing by the back corner of my truck, struggling to fight back the sudden wave of emotion the snow chains had brought on, when I heard an odd sound.


It was the high-pitched screech of tires against the road.


I looked behind me and gasped. Tyler’s van was coming right for me; I braced myself for the impact. I knew in the pit of my stomach that there was no way in hell I was going to make it out of this alive. I heard people screaming, and before closing my eyes took one fleeting glance at Edward who was being held back by his brother, Emmett I think.


The cars impact came quicker then I calculated, but I was never good at math. It knocked the air out of me and crushed my rib cage and legs. I couldn’t breathe. I knew what was coming, and I took it with open arms. Death has always seemed so much easier then life. The next thing I knew something cold and hard pierced the skin at my neck. I screamed even though I felt I had no lungs.


“Just keep your heart beating Bella. Please don’t give up yet. Please Bella.” I heard Edward’s musical voice force itself through my darkness. I had to obey him, I wanted to, but I didn’t no how to not give up. It was my body’s choice, not my own. I screamed again I agony.


“Push it off of her!” he yelled to only god knows who. I heard the car groan in protest, but felt Edward’s arms around me. I started to feel less and scream more. The pain of whatever Edward injected in me was worse then the car crushing me.


“Oh god, Alice she’s bleeding everywhere.”


“You and Jasper go, Emmett Rose and I can take care of her.” I felt myself being handed off to her, or maybe Emmett.


“Put her in the car, we have to take her to Carlisle. Stupid Edward couldn’t wait for the ambulance.” I continued to scream in pain.


What had I done to burn in hell?


The author's comments:
One night I was thinking to myself, "what if Edward let her get crushed by the van in Twilight? What would he have done?" I would like to think he would have changed her, so i wrote it out. I owe my inspration to Stephenie Meyer.

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Embrace19 GOLD said...
on Jul. 25 2015 at 9:11 pm
Embrace19 GOLD, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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Anything is possible with a little faith put on forth .

awesome view you have a gift a talent don't stop !!!!!!!

on Jan. 25 2015 at 9:53 pm
RunnerandSkater BRONZE, New Prague, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
I am trying to find myself. Sometimes that's not easy.
-Marilyn Monroe

Very interesting point of view. I like the twist.

on Dec. 26 2014 at 9:46 pm
kimberlyguzmanx SILVER, Holbrook, New York
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Favorite Quote:
The next chapter in your life, will always be more interesting than the last..

Interesting concept. But cool point of view.

evelyce_x23 said...
on Apr. 21 2014 at 12:42 pm
evelyce_x23, Bethlehem, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Keep smiling because life is a beautiful thing and there's so much to smile about.

I like your quote in this, "death has always seemed much easier then life" I agree, it seems so easy to do just end your life in a matter of seconds. It makes you think about how quickly your life could end a any moment.

on Mar. 7 2014 at 8:17 am
Parasytic-Surrealist SILVER, Kokomo, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Deduction is just the science of paying close attention.

I like this very much. Your prose is excellent. It makes me wonder what the rest of the books whould have been like, had there been any after this.

on Oct. 19 2013 at 2:53 pm
AnonymousHuman BRONZE, STANDDAARBUITEN, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Head up, stay strong. Fake smile, move on.

Very nice twist in the story, hadn't thought about it like that :3

samdewees GOLD said...
on Sep. 4 2013 at 2:29 pm
samdewees GOLD, Farmington, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"Fairy tales are more than true: not because they tell us that dragons exist, but because they tell us that dragons can be beaten." - Neil Gaiman

Love this. It really makes you think about what would happen if this did happen.

on Dec. 18 2012 at 2:58 pm
LinkinPark12 PLATINUM, Lincolnshire, Other
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Work like you don’t need money, love like you've never been hurt, and dance like no one's watching. ¦ I like change - but only when everything stays the same.

This is really good :3 interesting twist

on Feb. 7 2012 at 8:55 am
DarkIsThyThought BRONZE, Shishpipkabibble, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I think I know enough of hate- to say that for destruction ice- is also great- and would suffice.

Eew. What a disapointment. I had believed that this story was suppose to be making fun of twilight. Good writing skills, though.

Odyesseus said...
on Dec. 25 2011 at 2:19 am
Yaaaaaaaaah for bella dying

on Oct. 20 2011 at 12:33 pm
NiklausMikaelson1864 SILVER, Southwest Harbor, Maine
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"Please note that I am saying this as I twirl my metaphorical mustache." ~Talon McCallister

Wow. This is awesome. I hope to see more from you...you're really good.

on Sep. 12 2011 at 9:54 pm
MidnightNow1127 GOLD, Brentwood, California
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"Christus nos liberavit!"

I don't know why, but I laugh when bad things happen to good people. I like it. Nicely done.

dotn_me BRONZE said...
on Apr. 4 2011 at 5:38 pm
dotn_me BRONZE, Camarillo, California
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nice.. i like it...... what would have happened if edward hadnt stopped the van :D i like it, looking forward to the next part

on Dec. 16 2010 at 12:29 pm
GodsGirl36 PLATINUM, Topeka, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
Seeing isn't believing. Believing is seeing.

The title caught my eye...I've always wondered the same thing. This is very well written and I like the idea. Sounds like it could work ;-)

on Nov. 2 2010 at 6:36 pm
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis."~Jasmine Omg
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love"~Marylin Monroe
"I didn't tell him nowhere where you live" ~me ^-^
"I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs" ~Jasmine Omg

<3 very well written,but what happened to the humans watching? what did they see happen? <3

on Aug. 28 2010 at 10:58 am
NeverFallTooHard PLATINUM, Hartford, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Reason is powerless in the expression of Love.~ Rumi
Realisim, in painting, is what one wants to see, not what they really see. ~ Janet Fish

I like this idea. It's really out there different in a good way.

on Jul. 10 2010 at 7:56 am
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Very good! :) Very cool idea :)

on Jun. 23 2010 at 1:10 am
mflower2 BRONZE, Beaverton, Oregon
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You embody the writing style of Stephanie Meyers well.

on Jun. 1 2010 at 12:33 pm
So cool! keep writing <3

dant3 said...
on May. 6 2010 at 7:46 pm
i like it. i was curious due to the title of course (what an intriguing concept) and was surprising at my enjoyment of your story. it was well written and probably what would've happend in that situation. "Sttupid edward couldn't wait for the ambulence." - i love that line :)




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