The Pedestrian

September 18, 2008
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The world changesw from the gentle day,to the dark,misty, suspicious night.
A pedestrianstops to rest undet the streetlight. He is wearing baggy jeans and his faded green hat is worn and dirty. The street is dark except undcet the streetlight that buzzes ominously in the silence. Not many cars pass. It's late now. The sun's long gone and it's overcast.
A foreboding scene.

The pedestrian takes off his hat and fans himself with it. It's a hot night and he's beenwalking for a long time in the humidity. He looks up at the night sky, then peers around suspiciously into the darkness. Someone is watching him. And if something...suspicious were to happen, the silent,breathless night would overwhelm it. Nobody would know. The lights in the house across the street finally go out. A pickup truck pulls out of the driveway. The neighbor is off to work. Nobody seems to be watching. But what if someone is following the pedestrian? What if he doesn't make it home? What if someone can tell that he's afraid? The pedestrian puts his hat back on and conitnues on walking. He's not stopping again...

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authorgirl_4_19 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 4, 2011 at 2:12 pm
it felt a bit like stage instructions for a play, but the ending was chiling. The reader's mind will always fill in something more horrific than you could describe. good choice leaving it open ended
When the bunny hops... said...
Feb. 21, 2009 at 12:16 am
AMAZING!!! SERIOUSLY: if i didn't know any better I'd thought a famous author wrote that! PROFESSIONAL!!!
emieLUV1023 said...
Oct. 19, 2008 at 12:12 am
Oh my God, that was a great story, I hope your story kicks butt, it was really great!!!
Anita22 said...
Oct. 12, 2008 at 3:06 am
Monica, wow the story you wrote already gave me creepy! But I want to know what happens! Congrats on being published... Good luck!
Anissa said...
Oct. 12, 2008 at 1:06 am
Awesomeness!!!! i love it and i remember u read this in LAL. Keep it up and make a movie with me! =-D
Your BFF Anissa! =-) said...
Oct. 9, 2008 at 12:01 am
I love it! And congrats on this being published, your such a great writer and you should shoot for your dream. I love your stories and i like this one too. Its eerie and this is what would scare me.... =-)
luckydog said...
Sept. 28, 2008 at 5:41 pm
i liked this...i wonder what will happen next?! good story!
liz said...
Sept. 27, 2008 at 4:13 am
OMG you did it.I am so proud of you.Remind me not to walk the streets alone at night I won't be able to stop looking over my shoulder. I look forward to reading your next story. Congrats
Adams mom said...
Sept. 26, 2008 at 1:14 pm
Monica, Congratulations! Great story. Keep up the good work.
LaLa said...
Sept. 25, 2008 at 10:13 pm
Monica, Great job on this and congrats on being published! The scene you paint is eerie and I wouldn't want to be that pedestrian... very creepy! Keep up the good work
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