Eternal Night : Chapter 1

March 27, 2010
"Elle!" Yelled Allison, running up to me. "Elle, wait up!" I stopped and waited for her. Alison White and I have been best friends since kindergarten. "So Elle, who are you taking to the fall dance?" She asked tossing her dark brown hair behind her. "I 'm not sure yet, who are you taking?" We started walking at a normal pace. A cool November breeze made me shiver. "I'm hoping Dominic Daniels asks me." She replied. I noticed that when she said the name her brown eyes lit up.

"Who's -" But then I was interrupted by Rebekah and Blake laughing. Ever since they started dating she won't stop talking to, and about him. “What’s so funny?" I asked. They looked at each other, and then Rebekah answered “I don't remember." This made them laugh even more. They're a great couple, they both have blonde hair and sapphire-blue eyes, and they also love to laugh.

"So what are you talking about?" Katlyne asked when they stopped. “The dance and who we are taking." Answered Allison. "Hey guys," Rebecca spoke up, "Want to go ice skating with Blake and I later?" "Sure." Came from everyone. "I might have to leave early though; I still have research on our project in Science class." Katlyne said. We had to choose a living thing and do a description on it. She chose wolves, she loves them and she was great at drawing them. "Oh, I finished mine in class." Allison said
We all started walking when Valerie jogged over, her long black hair in a braid. It only took me three days to know that she was popular, a head cheerleader, and nobody likes her. Not because she's weird or anything, but because she's mean. "Hi Ellie." she called. "Maybe if we put our heads down and run she won't find us." suggested Rebekah. "No, we can't she already knows it's us and she can smell our fear." Katlyne whispered. We started giggling as she walked over to us.
“Hey Ellie, what’s so funny?" she repeated. "Uh hi, it's Elle." I finally answered. “And nothing.” "Yeah whatever... Are you going to try out for the cheerleading squad." she asked. "Yeah, I'm going to try out." I answered. Then two more girls walked up. "This is Moranda." she pointed to the girl on her right with a pretty, pixie-shaped face, short dark-brown hair and bright blue eyes. "And this is Madison." she pointed to the girl on her left with blonde hair just below her shoulder and brown eyes. She waved at me. I looked over at Alison; she looked like she was going to hurt her. "We have to go." I said quickly. “Wait-you better be good at tryouts, like, don’t waste our time.” Valerie added in as we started to walk away. “Don’t worry, she won’t.” said Allison through gritted teeth.

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katlyne said...
May 22, 2011 at 7:27 pm the story...just throwing this out name is legit Katlyne..and I've never seen it spelled that way anywhere else. where did you get the inspiration for that name??
SerraAngel replied...
Jun. 9, 2011 at 1:17 pm
i have a friend named Katlyne and she helped give me inspiration for the book along with Tori and Rebekah :)
EllieK. said...
Jun. 6, 2010 at 3:22 pm

Good start, it was a bit difficult to read because of the dialogue not being spaced out. Other than that it was a good first chapter. I"ll be sure to read the rest.

Would anyone mind checking out any of my work and comment/rating. Thanks, Elliek

TeamJacobArchuleta said...
Apr. 19, 2010 at 7:51 pm
i thought this was a good way to start it cuz u know a little bit about all the characters, i'll definitley go check out the rest of the chapters, great chapter 1 :)
SerraAngel said...
Apr. 17, 2010 at 1:12 pm
Some chapters are from different pionts of views.
Ally25 said...
Apr. 17, 2010 at 12:26 pm
This isn't a bad start. I got a little more confused , when you started introducing charactors mostly because you didn't space out  your talking. But you also could have added more. But over all I realy likedthe story.. Keep writing.
SerraAngel said...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 9:00 pm
Plz comment
SerraAngel replied...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 9:04 pm
the other chapters are under 'nonfiction'. Oops. Plz check out chapters 2-7.
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