15-Minute Wait for the Results This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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Skinny bird legs lying next to mine.
The one rubbing my thigh is tapping
up and down and up and down
because you are nervous about something.
Your finger, the one with the big red plastic ring,
is tapping on the peeling dark veneer rhythmically.
Tap-a-tap-a-tap-tap-tap-tap-a-tap
Your other hand is so clammy.
Like a turtleneck on a hot day,
like a wet turtleneck on a humid day.
The salmon-colored plastic sticks to my upper arm
in the small space between us on this love seat,
peeling away from my skin when I shift
with a sticky sound. Ouch.
There’s a rip, all jagged with
school bus-colored foam poking out.
Your nails are digging in,
as short as they are.
You are so afraid.
My nails are digging into your hand as well –
I can see the red-lined moons standing out plain as sight.
What was that old saying?
Red sky at night, sailor’s delight?
Or was it take warning?
Does a moon make the night red?
I ask you out loud, you laugh,
this queer little laugh
that isn’t a laugh at all.
Not really.
And you say it’s the first.
So we should delight and dance together like
we were doing just last week under that
tacky disco ball.
The door opens with a creak that reminds me
of an old haunted house. It’s all meant to scare.
The doctor walks in – shuffles really – lab coat knocking against his knees.
He’s kind-looking and old. Like a grandfather. Or uncle. Or something.
He moves past us.
Sits at his desk.
Pulls on his glasses – his eyes look so big.
Pulls out a manila folder.
Opens it.
Turns the page. Again. Again.
Licks his lips.
Takes glasses off – his eyes are small once more.
His chin rests on his folded hands.
Pensive.
“The test was positive.”
Your grip tightens, my grip tightens.
Many red moons across our hands.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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SilverBeam said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 1:13 pm
I would love to read more of your work; it was great! Please, check me out! I am looking for critique so please, anyone, check out my work!
 
Little2Feet said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 9:59 am
wow. that was REALLY good and i can't wait to read more of your work!
 
Karamel This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 10:51 pm
Wow. I was absolutely stunned when I finished reading this. It's incredible: the way you keep the reader in such suspense, drawing the reason for the 15 minute wait out and getting a full story out of it. Also, I'm an advocate of details, and every one was clear to me in this story. Fantastic; thank you.
 
echome94 said...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 6:54 pm

Okay people it's a boy and a girl. There is a test and she is talking about the previous week. Obviously it's a pregnacy test. He got her pregnant

 

 
justwannabeme said...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 3:18 pm

that was awesome! at first i had no idea what you were talking about but thenn when he said the test was positive i got it! haha. awesome!!! i loved it and i loved how discriptive it was!

great job!! :)

 
BrownEyedRainbowGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 10:23 am

its good :) i like the way you described everything... and it had good flow. good word choice, and good grammar...

haha sorry :) i'm kinda freaking out about editing an english paper right now.. and your writing inspired me a little :)

thanks(:

 
lyssa28 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 8:29 pm
It takes me 3 or 4 weeks :(
 
bethy4916 said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 4:06 pm
It came together really well! I loved it!
 
s.nichole. said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 12:38 am
I really enjoyed this. Especially since you don't reply to the comments that ask the type of test. That makes it all the more interesting. I would say "keep writing", but that comment is awfully close to "repeat yourself." (;
 
DaydreamBeliever This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 6:22 pm
that was supposed to be a reply to Sasha S.
 
DaydreamBeliever This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 6:21 pm
on average, mine have taken about a month. 
 
Macx14 said...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 3:18 pm
Very relatable topic to teenagers who've made this mistake, very well done.
 
Starbuck said...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 1:13 pm
Good Piece, but the title is a little bit long, and overly descriptive.
 
jumpingbug13 said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 5:28 pm

that was really good :)

 

 
Sasha S. said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 2:39 pm
hey you wrote this really well can u or someone else who reads this tell me how long did it take for u to get a conformation email tht ur article was posted to the site?
 
ellie315 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 9:44 pm
depends...sometimes a day, sometimes several. just be patient:) ive had experiences where something was posted the next day, and other times when it took about a week!
 
Macx14 replied...
Sept. 21, 2010 at 3:20 pm
Yeah, I just started posting stuff and it can be like one to maybe....a week at the most, but not too bad.
 
bethy4916 replied...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 4:10 pm
Really? I submitted mine weeks ago and nothing has happened. It's wierd.
 
Macx14 replied...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 7:49 pm
Oh my gosh, yeah, that is really weird.... I wonder why....
 
Katie1234 replied...
Nov. 4, 2010 at 8:04 am
The article I poste took like a week. The picture I posted however, took like a month.
 
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