15-Minute Wait for the Results MAG

By Emily Broderick, New Market, MD

Skinny bird legs lying next to mine.
The one rubbing my thigh is tapping
up and down and up and down
because you are nervous about something.
Your finger, the one with the big red plastic ring,
is tapping on the peeling dark veneer rhythmically.
Tap-a-tap-a-tap-tap-tap-tap-a-tap
Your other hand is so clammy.
Like a turtleneck on a hot day,
like a wet turtleneck on a humid day.
The salmon-colored plastic sticks to my upper arm
in the small space between us on this love seat,
peeling away from my skin when I shift
with a sticky sound. Ouch.
There’s a rip, all jagged with
school bus-colored foam poking out.
Your nails are digging in,
as short as they are.
You are so afraid.
My nails are digging into your hand as well –
I can see the red-lined moons standing out plain as sight.
What was that old saying?
Red sky at night, sailor’s delight?
Or was it take warning?
Does a moon make the night red?
I ask you out loud, you laugh,
this queer little laugh
that isn’t a laugh at all.
Not really.
And you say it’s the first.
So we should delight and dance together like
we were doing just last week under that
tacky disco ball.
The door opens with a creak that reminds me
of an old haunted house. It’s all meant to scare.
The doctor walks in – shuffles really – lab coat knocking against his knees.
He’s kind-looking and old. Like a grandfather. Or uncle. Or something.
He moves past us.
Sits at his desk.
Pulls on his glasses – his eyes look so big.
Pulls out a manila folder.
Opens it.
Turns the page. Again. Again.
Licks his lips.
Takes glasses off – his eyes are small once more.
His chin rests on his folded hands.
Pensive.
“The test was positive.”
Your grip tightens, my grip tightens.
Many red moons across our hands.



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on Jan. 9 2011 at 6:48 pm
writerinfinity PLATINUM, Arlington, Texas
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I liked it.. one question thought, what were the results for?

on Jan. 9 2011 at 5:00 pm
aspiringauthor_ BRONZE, Fairfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Darkness cannot drive out darkness, only light can do that. Hate cannot drive out hate, only love can do that." - MLK Jr.

I loved it! Amazing. :) One question... What results? :)

on Dec. 10 2010 at 6:14 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"A guy walks up to me and asks 'What's Punk?'. So I kick over a garbage can and say 'That's punk!'. So he kicks over a garbage can and says 'That's Punk'?, and I say 'No that's trendy'!"- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

No kidding?

 

Great poem.


on Nov. 26 2010 at 11:04 pm
NicoleS PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
If someone thinks that love and peace is a cliche that must have been left behind in the Sixties, that's his problem. Love and peace are eternal.
- John Lennon

this was really well structured and i like the descriptions you used.i loved it!!

on Nov. 26 2010 at 1:56 pm
xEmmiiix BRONZE, East Meadow, New York
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i love this article...its very well written. it makes mew wonder if this how my freind felt when she got tested for cancer.

on Nov. 26 2010 at 1:13 pm
SilverBeam BRONZE, IGH, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Depression isn't enjoyable. It feels as if there's a thousand pound weight on you. You feel like your heart will crack at any moment; so you sit and you pray it won't be in front of the guy that caused it."

I would love to read more of your work; it was great! Please, check me out! I am looking for critique so please, anyone, check out my work!

on Nov. 26 2010 at 9:59 am
Leena7395 SILVER, Spring Grove, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Be who you are because those who matter don't mind, and those who mind don't matter.

wow. that was REALLY good and i can't wait to read more of your work!

on Nov. 4 2010 at 10:51 pm
Karamel PLATINUM, Gwinn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Clever people will recognize and tolerate nothing but cleverness." -Anonymous

Wow. I was absolutely stunned when I finished reading this. It's incredible: the way you keep the reader in such suspense, drawing the reason for the 15 minute wait out and getting a full story out of it. Also, I'm an advocate of details, and every one was clear to me in this story. Fantastic; thank you.

on Nov. 4 2010 at 8:09 pm
BrookXoxo BRONZE, Andrews AFB, Maryland
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It takes me 1-10 days 10 MAX

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on Nov. 4 2010 at 7:24 pm
Katie1234 GOLD, Velva, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"When life becomes more than you can stand; fall to your knees"
"To be normal is to be boring."
"You cannot make men good by law."
"Christians believe that Jesus Christ is the son of God because He said so."
"To be a Christian means to forgive the inexcusable, because God has forgiven the inexcusable in you."

if it had been approved people probably reported it. If it had still been pending to begin with, it was probably dissaproved.

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on Nov. 4 2010 at 6:57 pm
acc13a GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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I posted an article about a month ago. it used to be under the tab "my work", but faded and labeled "pending approval," but yesterday it just disappeared. it isn't listen anywhere. anyone know what's going on?

on Nov. 4 2010 at 6:54 pm
echome94 PLATINUM, Daleville, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
When the world around me ceases to exist and then i will open up and let a cruel man like you in


~Unknown~

Okay people it's a boy and a girl. There is a test and she is talking about the previous week. Obviously it's a pregnacy test. He got her pregnant

 


on Nov. 4 2010 at 3:18 pm
Hannahgee6 BRONZE, Greensburg, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
therefore do not worry about tomorrow. for tomorrow will worry about itself. each day has enough trouble of its own.
-jesus

that was awesome! at first i had no idea what you were talking about but thenn when he said the test was positive i got it! haha. awesome!!! i loved it and i loved how discriptive it was!

great job!! :)


on Nov. 4 2010 at 10:23 am
CallMeSunshine GOLD, Lehi, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Creativity takes courage."

its good :) i like the way you described everything... and it had good flow. good word choice, and good grammar...

haha sorry :) i'm kinda freaking out about editing an english paper right now.. and your writing inspired me a little :)

thanks(:


Katie1234 GOLD said...
on Nov. 4 2010 at 8:04 am
Katie1234 GOLD, Velva, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"When life becomes more than you can stand; fall to your knees"
"To be normal is to be boring."
"You cannot make men good by law."
"Christians believe that Jesus Christ is the son of God because He said so."
"To be a Christian means to forgive the inexcusable, because God has forgiven the inexcusable in you."

The article I poste took like a week. The picture I posted however, took like a month.

lyssa28 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 13 2010 at 8:29 pm
lyssa28 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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It takes me 3 or 4 weeks :(

on Oct. 13 2010 at 7:49 pm
deus-ex-machina14 BRONZE, Stewartsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"There are two main tragedies in life. One is not getting what one wants, and the other is getting it." -Oscar Wilde

Oh my gosh, yeah, that is really weird.... I wonder why....

on Oct. 13 2010 at 4:10 pm
bethy4916 BRONZE, Paonia, Colorado
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Really? I submitted mine weeks ago and nothing has happened. It's wierd.

on Oct. 13 2010 at 4:06 pm
bethy4916 BRONZE, Paonia, Colorado
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It came together really well! I loved it!

on Oct. 13 2010 at 12:38 am
s.nichole. PLATINUM, Ossian, Indiana
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I really enjoyed this. Especially since you don't reply to the comments that ask the type of test. That makes it all the more interesting. I would say "keep writing", but that comment is awfully close to "repeat yourself." (;




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