15-Minute Wait for the Results This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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Skinny bird legs lying next to mine.
The one rubbing my thigh is tapping
up and down and up and down
because you are nervous about something.
Your finger, the one with the big red plastic ring,
is tapping on the peeling dark veneer rhythmically.
Tap-a-tap-a-tap-tap-tap-tap-a-tap
Your other hand is so clammy.
Like a turtleneck on a hot day,
like a wet turtleneck on a humid day.
The salmon-colored plastic sticks to my upper arm
in the small space between us on this love seat,
peeling away from my skin when I shift
with a sticky sound. Ouch.
There’s a rip, all jagged with
school bus-colored foam poking out.
Your nails are digging in,
as short as they are.
You are so afraid.
My nails are digging into your hand as well –
I can see the red-lined moons standing out plain as sight.
What was that old saying?
Red sky at night, sailor’s delight?
Or was it take warning?
Does a moon make the night red?
I ask you out loud, you laugh,
this queer little laugh
that isn’t a laugh at all.
Not really.
And you say it’s the first.
So we should delight and dance together like
we were doing just last week under that
tacky disco ball.
The door opens with a creak that reminds me
of an old haunted house. It’s all meant to scare.
The doctor walks in – shuffles really – lab coat knocking against his knees.
He’s kind-looking and old. Like a grandfather. Or uncle. Or something.
He moves past us.
Sits at his desk.
Pulls on his glasses – his eyes look so big.
Pulls out a manila folder.
Opens it.
Turns the page. Again. Again.
Licks his lips.
Takes glasses off – his eyes are small once more.
His chin rests on his folded hands.
Pensive.
“The test was positive.”
Your grip tightens, my grip tightens.
Many red moons across our hands.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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Firework2013 said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 6:58 pm
I love how yo left the ending. It could be many things. It could be a pregnacy test, or for cancer, hiv, anything. I loved it, you did a really good job. And kept the reader in suspense even when it was over.
 
cloudskater1 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 8:15 pm
Wow, Firework, I really respect how you're being so polite about this...most people would have let RixxOhSixx really have it, but you're keeping your cool. That's pretty admirable in my book. And, I don't think it truly matters how you spelled "you" or "embarrassment." What matters is that you commented about how good this piece of work was, which I agree with very much. I like the suspense of it, too, and the beauty of which it was written. This person is obviously an amazing writing with a lot... (more »)
 
lysandra replied...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 8:37 pm
Holy harsh much.Must be guys as you two are acting like jerks!!
 
PerfectMGymnast This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 11:37 pm
BEAUTIFUL!!!! And i love the suspense leading up to the ending!! :))
 
NoLabelsPlease said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 5:42 pm
Loved it, but just curious...what were the results for?
 
MaskedCellist This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 12:47 am
I'm pretty sure it was a pregnancy test.
 
Cityboy13 replied...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 8:35 am
LOL... think very hard rofl
 
GothChik95 said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 5:00 pm
I like the ones with a mystery or cliffhangers! I think abt them for the rest of the day. Great work!!
 
to.hold.the.sun This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 10:44 am
I love how ambiguous it is.
 
AnarchyIsMyFriend said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 5:56 pm
What were the results for? 
 
HannahBooBananas replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 1:32 pm
Isn't this about a pregnancy test? It sounds like it.
 
StayGold replied...
Jul. 5, 2011 at 8:04 pm

Still don't know....

 

 
imrighthereyouknow said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 11:06 am
In some ways I want to know what the test was for, but I like how you never revealed it. Anyone who reads this can imagine anything they like, to fit what they want to hear, or what's happening in their own life.
 
AthenaBook replied...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 7:21 pm
Totally agree! It made it very evasive and thoughful, and kind of let the reader amke up his/her's own ending. Fabulous job!
 
StarWorks said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 8:19 am
AMAZING. I liked the suspense, it's very well written.
 
the_real_reggie_rocket said...
Jan. 31, 2011 at 7:39 am
*described.
 
HIPPIEatHEART_writerINsoul This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 8:56 pm

Awesome!
I like how you didn't give too much away, like what the test was for or what happened, etc.

I like the mystery, and too few people appreciate it these days. Leave it to the reader's imagination!

Well done :D

 
writerinfinity said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 6:48 pm
I liked it.. one question thought, what were the results for?
 
Aspiringauhor said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 5:00 pm
I loved it! Amazing. :) One question... What results? :)
 
NicoleS This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 11:04 pm
this was really well structured and i like the descriptions you used.i loved it!!
 
Writer12 said...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 1:56 pm
i love this article...its very well written. it makes mew wonder if this how my freind felt when she got tested for cancer.
 
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