Wash Me Away

November 28, 2009
By loveibanez BRONZE, Maumee, Ohio
loveibanez BRONZE, Maumee, Ohio
4 articles 1 photo 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you get to the end of your rope, tie a knot and hang on!" -Ben Franklin


I want to erase it all. All I want to do is rip the memories out of my mind and start over. I want the sea to wash over the sand and carry all my problems away to the bottom of the sea with the shells and the rocks. Like the sea, my mind has pressure. The further down you go, and the older I get, the more pressure I feel and the harder it gets to breathe. I want to erase all that I have written because none of it is what I want it to be. Everything I do comes out wrong. I want to see the flames of the pages and the smoke of what once was. Nothing would make me happier. Except you. I don’t know who you are or what you look like, but I need someone to believe in. I need my crutch that catches me when I fall. One that won’t put me down. You can make me happy without trying, your smile will light my heart on fire and your voice is enough to make my stomach flip. I know you are out there, somewhere, deep in the ocean blue along with all my problems. Because when that tide washes them all away, it will leave the pure white sand, and that’s you.


The author's comments:
Not my best work by a long shot, but I really wanted to submit something, and this is not my typical writing style, but I would really appriciate your feedback weather it be good, or bad.

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on Feb. 14 2010 at 10:12 pm
loveibanez BRONZE, Maumee, Ohio
4 articles 1 photo 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you get to the end of your rope, tie a knot and hang on!" -Ben Franklin

Totaly get what you are saying, like I said, not my best work!

on Feb. 14 2010 at 10:21 am
nice work- totally deep- meaningful. Great content, great voice, the sentences were kind of choppy though. Maybe try some paragraphs too, kinds hard to keep your place when your reading it.

Over great work keep it up go junior high people lol

on Feb. 10 2010 at 4:51 pm
loveibanez BRONZE, Maumee, Ohio
4 articles 1 photo 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you get to the end of your rope, tie a knot and hang on!" -Ben Franklin

Aww, thanks! and you know how much it means when someone comments or gives feedback, sorry the link didn't work!

on Feb. 10 2010 at 3:30 pm
WriteForLove GOLD, New Iberia, Louisiana
13 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Laugh as much as you breathe and love as long as you live."

Hey again. You're very welcome. The link didn't work. I searched Dear You Love Liar in the search engine and couldn't find it. So sorry but I think you're a great writer and keep it up!

on Feb. 10 2010 at 9:03 am
loveibanez BRONZE, Maumee, Ohio
4 articles 1 photo 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you get to the end of your rope, tie a knot and hang on!" -Ben Franklin

http ://www.teenink .com /nonfiction/personal_experience/article/157500/Dear-You-Love-Liar/ <--- Thats the link, and thankyou for commenting!

on Feb. 10 2010 at 9:01 am
loveibanez BRONZE, Maumee, Ohio
4 articles 1 photo 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you get to the end of your rope, tie a knot and hang on!" -Ben Franklin

Haha, I think I must of posted it annonously (or however you spell it)

on Feb. 9 2010 at 10:17 pm
WriteForLove GOLD, New Iberia, Louisiana
13 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Laugh as much as you breathe and love as long as you live."

Hey, you commented my piece "I Hate You, I Love You". Thank you very much. It really means the world to me. I really love this. You say this isn't your best. Well then I would love to read your best because this is amazing! I love when you say "your voice is enough to make my stomach flip." It's such a simple phrase but if you've ever been there you know what it really feels like..and I have definitely been there!

P.S. You said to read "Dear You, Love Liar" but I can't seem to find it.

Anyway, I loved this and keep writing!


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