I Am Your Killer Redena Part 1

May 16, 2009
By Bloodscarlet SILVER, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
Bloodscarlet SILVER, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
7 articles 1 photo 3 comments

Her scream echoed in Alice’s mind. Her blood stained Alice’s hands. Her name was Redena Lonanbon.
It might have been Alice’s imagination, a hallucination; the whole murder might have been fake, if it wasn’t for the stillness for Redena.
The butterflies fluttered, floating slowly on breeze. Alice stood there, in the white gown, a bejeweled dagger was in her hand.
“Kill Her!!!!” the voice screamed in Alice’s head

In one swoop Redena was dead.
Redena's scream woke her out of her trance. She saw her best friend lying there dead, in her own blood. Alice crumpled with a sob.


The author's comments:
This first piece of my story is about Alice a tormented 14 year old who killed her best friend Redena (Redeena) while in a trance-like state.

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on Jul. 29 2010 at 10:26 pm
(: i love writting

on Feb. 14 2010 at 6:52 am
Bloodscarlet SILVER, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
7 articles 1 photo 3 comments
Well could you tell me why?.... I'd like to know..critism is needed

on Aug. 20 2009 at 12:04 pm
Scarlette Sutton BRONZE, Newhaven, California
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I think you really should work on this. No offense but this needs improvement.




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