Poetry MAG

By Unknown, Unknown, Unknown

   "Ya know," he rocked back in the wicker chair made weak by years of the sultry ocean air, "I used to write her poetry." His eyebrows raised in the vagueness and his eyes wandered absently.

The placid expression on her bronzed face hid the exasperation behind it - a facade erected to prevent her own emotions from blubbering up to the betraying eyes.

"Nothing really good. I can't write. At least no one ever told me that," he rubbed his upper lip with his forefinger and touched his chin,"I could.""

She shifted on the peeling railing and considered flicking off a dangling chip of white paint. Realizing he was looking at her, the edges of her mouth flickered upward with practiced understanding.

He rubbed the rotting, wooden porch floor with his bare toes. And kicked the air with a pff sound. "Poetry" he mocked himself. His eyes wandered out to the breathing ocean and a gull floating on the breeze above it.

She took in a quick breath, as if to say something. Then paused. "Poetry," she nodded.n



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i love this !

wilectric99 said...
on Mar. 4 2011 at 7:46 am
really unique. look forward to your others

on Dec. 24 2010 at 5:43 pm
Phoenix97 PLATINUM, Minneapolis, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
See lyrics to "Let the Waters Rise" by MIKESCHAIR and "Everything" by Lifehouse

I would say johnahern's comment obviously shows a 'weekness' of writing capability on his part. ;) Anyways, I like your story. It's short, descriptive, and effectively captures a moment. Beautiful work here. :)

on Dec. 24 2010 at 3:34 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I particularily liked the part about the breathing ocean and the gull. That, to me, was the best description in this peice.

The~Watcher said...
on Dec. 24 2010 at 10:12 am

I liked it.

And you misspelled 'weakness'. I wouldn't be pointing fingers...


johnahern said...
on Dec. 8 2010 at 1:04 pm
I see that you use many sound devices throughout this piece, that to me, obviously shows a weekness of writing capability on your part. 


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