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The tides of the sunken ships lost at sea

February 12, 2015
By SCSKATE SILVER, Austin, Texas
SCSKATE SILVER, Austin, Texas
9 articles 5 photos 23 comments

The tides of the sunken ships lost at sea

The soldiers who took a deep vow and swore

Their allegiance to our great country be

As memories creep along the frayed shore

 

We drown ourselves in their saddened sorrow

6 months have slipped away,and then a year

Hoping that they will return tomorrow

But it’s the unknowingness that we fear

 

Stark stone memorials have long been built

Overgrown with wild flowers and spreading weeds

Bringing us hollowed regret and sharp guilt

Wondering, was this the price of their deeds

 

By now, we ourselves bury deep and tuck

As our reservoirs drip dry out of luck



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Ana143 GOLD said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 7:55 pm
Ana143 GOLD, Bolivar, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Your always beautiful in my eyes"
"Be who you are not what someone else wants you to be"

This is really good!

SCSKATE SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 7:17 pm
SCSKATE SILVER, Austin, Texas
9 articles 5 photos 23 comments
thanks for all the feedback you have given me. in the last two lines, I was trying to convey the message of how while we were deep in sorrow, we ourselves were dying "drip dry out of luck" and then bury deep and tuck as in death.

on Feb. 23 2015 at 4:56 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
5 articles 0 photos 266 comments
Like this poem AND its length. A deep message, rhyning isnt forced. Great! Confused by 'we ourselves bury deep and tuck' but thats just me nit-picking