He's A Rainbow

February 17, 2010
By SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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His smile is the sunshine
His smile is a golden ray
His smile is a circle of heaven
Warmth on a cold day

It makes his perfect eyes shine
It’s like a candle flame
It’s something you can stare at
A bright heart it contains

I don’t know how to describe it
It’s that warm and fuzzy feeling
It’s a tingle through your fingertips
It’s the glances you’ve been stealing

His smile is the sunshine
But this you already know
Of course his laugh will be the rain
So together it’s a rainbow


The author's comments:
I wrote this kinda randomly so hoping you like it!

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on Aug. 10 2011 at 6:34 pm
Seaa_Bearr SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
I want to be so f**king dope that it offends people.. I want people to feel a little disrespected when I show up.

So cute. If you just want to sing this to me i'd be okay with it. I'm a girl too.. but i'd still be okay with it.(:

on Feb. 15 2011 at 7:12 pm
drmstarlet21 GOLD, Matthews, North Carolina
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Hi there! I'd just like to let you know I've been having an awful day, one of those where you feel out of sorts and it's full of sadness and distress, you know? Anyway, when I read this, it unexpectedly made me smile. Such a simple-seeming reaction to such a simple-sounding poem is incredible, although both go much deeper than what is seen on the surface. It made me wonder whether there are really boys like this out there, and I hope the answer is yes. To quote another user, the picture it painted in my mind was astounding. It reminds me of the horizon. Thank you for making my day.

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on Aug. 23 2010 at 4:31 pm
_AMZ_ BRONZE, Hemet, California
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Favorite Quote:
"life is like a box of chocolates...you never know what you're going to get"

This made me smile. Adorable and creative! I love how you bring all of these elements together to not just make a poem but to paint a beautiful picture, I loved it!

on Aug. 7 2010 at 7:46 pm
Fredwardness SILVER, Romeo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"The stars are blazing like rebel diamonds cut out of the sun" -The Killers (Read My Mind)

"If you don't know where you're going, any road will take you there." -George Harrison

This is a cute poem, It's one of those poems that make you smile despite yourself or how you're feeling. I like it, you did a good job, my friend. :)

LilyC1227 GOLD said...
on Aug. 5 2010 at 4:16 pm
LilyC1227 GOLD, Syosset, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I believe that everything happens for a reason. People change so that you can learn to let go, things go wrong so that you appreciate them when they're right, you believe lies so you eventually learn to trust no one but yourself, and sometimes good things fall apart so better things can fall together."
— Marilyn Monroe

This is such a cute poem! Sounds like quite a special guy...

on Aug. 3 2010 at 9:25 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world, and stop it going to sleep.

~Salman Rushdie

VERry cute!!

Birder SILVER said...
on Aug. 1 2010 at 9:38 am
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"

Very well written poem, nice rhyming, I really like it!

on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:15 am
wild-free BRONZE, Billerica, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"All good things are wild and free." - Henry David Thoreau

"It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live." - Albus Dumbledore

This poem was very sweet and I liked it a lot! I don't have much to criticize except maybe the flow of it. Actually, the flow isn't very bad, it could just be improved a bit. For example, I feel that the first verse could be rewritten without having 'his smile' three times. It gets too repetitive. But other than that, It was very good! Great job. :)

on Jul. 31 2010 at 7:00 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Good to know. Lol :)

on Jul. 30 2010 at 2:14 pm
JustKeepRowin SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Peace begins with a smile."-Mother Teresa

lol! you know what's weird.. I'm Sarah, too! Small world... or really common name. lol! I also enjoy my pancakes!

on Jul. 28 2010 at 10:56 am
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Lol me too. Hi I'm Sarah. Weooowww I like pancakes. Lol :D

 


on Jul. 27 2010 at 10:46 pm
JustKeepRowin SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Peace begins with a smile."-Mother Teresa

Okay, I probably have the worst advice for you because I am seriously lacking in the poetry section of my brain, but I do like have this poem flowed. I really want to met this boy you were talking about just because of this poem. You made him sound dreamy. You gave me a very good picture of him in my mind. I liked this poem; however, I personally, think it could have flowed a little better... That's just me though. Sorry this is so long, but I like to talk and I'm hyper which doesn't help! :D

on Jul. 26 2010 at 6:25 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

WOW, I CAN'T BELIEVE I DIDN'T COMMENT ON THIS YET! :'(

Good job! This boy sounds very sweet, he should be honored you wrote this about him!

AMAZING JOB, SARAH!!! :)


on Jul. 25 2010 at 8:02 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Thank you! I know exactly what you mean :)

 


on Jul. 25 2010 at 7:03 pm
cantfindascreename BRONZE, Chino Hills, California
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Favorite Quote:
"The best way to find yourself is to lose yourself in service to others"

Well I will start by saying that I really liked this! But if you want me to be mean(not that I have much to be mean about) I would just say to try and use more realistic, or just more descriptive vocabulary. For example, you said his perfect eyes, which isn't bad, but to make it original i would use a less used word? If this makes any sense, it does in my head(:  But truly i just thought it was really good and really cute!

on Jul. 25 2010 at 8:28 am
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Thank you! I'll see what I can do. :)

on Jul. 25 2010 at 6:39 am
partlycloudyholiday SILVER, Palmer, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." - by Theodor Seuss Geisel

This poem is so cute! I would suggest re-writing it without the repetition. Repetition can be a useful tool, but being too repetitive can get boring. Overall, it's adorable and it made me smile. :)

on Jul. 24 2010 at 9:43 pm
mudpuppy BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of cheese and flower petal sometimes it's soft and sweet, sometimes it just plain stinks. - M.J.

You're welcome.

on Jul. 24 2010 at 9:39 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Ha :) Thank you, it means a lot. 

on Jul. 24 2010 at 9:38 pm
mudpuppy BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of cheese and flower petal sometimes it's soft and sweet, sometimes it just plain stinks. - M.J.

Angelic. Whoever this boy is must be someone really special. He should be touched.


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