Independence Day | Teen Ink
  1. Home
  2. Poetry
  3. Free Verse
  4. Independence Day

Independence Day

February 18, 2015
By --Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
More by this author
--Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
15 articles 0 photos 32 comments
View profile

I weep for the stars,

So quickly forgotten

In the presence of

Majestic, booming

Fireworks.

© Kevan B., Beaverton, OR

Post a comment
Submit your own

Similar Articles

Previous Next
Poetry
Pretentious
By Kimora Braithwaite
Indian Trail, NC
Poetry
My Sister's Keeper
By Angels1031 BRONZE
Fort Worth, Texas
Angels1031 BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 4 comments
View profile
Poetry
The Death Sentence
By Chris Shu BRONZE
Fort Lee, New Jersey
Chris Shu BRONZE, Fort Lee, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
Alice
By Keasbey GOLD
La Habra Heights, California
Keasbey GOLD, La Habra Heights, California
12 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will no longer pray on my knees, to a god who's left me so many times. I will no longer pray on my knees, to a god who won't answer my call."

View profile
Poetry
The Moon
By Izzy Hare BRONZE
Camano Island, Washington
Izzy Hare BRONZE, Camano Island, Washington
2 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
what is it?
By stardom21 BRONZE
Suisun City, California
stardom21 BRONZE, Suisun City, California
1 article 0 photos 1 comment
View profile

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 1 comment.

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 28 2015 at 2:04 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 523 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

View profile
I like this a lot :) To me it seems like a metaphor, for legendary people of the past being blocked out by today's celebrities. I do think you could have not put those spaces between the lines, and maybe lower-cased "so", "in", "majestic" and "fireworks", give it a sense of being a broken up sentence, if that makes sense? Either way, I love the idea behind this, it's really unique and beautiful. (Unless you literally prefer stars over fireworks, in which case same! They're much quieter! :))