Fire or Ice

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If I should ever have a heart to stop,

It would stop its counting beat for you

However the burning desire

To burn your lips with mine of fire

'Cause your icy touch sends a shrill

And sets my nerves alight still

 

The exhilarating rush when your adoring eyes lock mine

still makes my cheeks flame and cower in sublime

 

And if the world should perish not once but twice

Fire or ice

I would face my doom with you at my side and laugh

And I would whisper the final words 'I love you'

And not have to listen to hear you say them too.






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evaalli said...
Mar. 1 at 8:06 pm
This is really good :)
 
GraceTaylor12This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 28 at 6:00 pm
Wow! This is amazing!
 
SammyLuv said...
Jan. 11 at 7:05 pm
Amazing Poem love it :)
 
Ray--yoThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 9, 2016 at 10:07 pm
This is absolutely incredible. Wow. Congratulations.
 
Black_Pool said...
Jun. 13, 2016 at 8:23 am
That's really brave of you to not expect those words back :)
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Jun. 5, 2016 at 10:25 am
@wizad , thank you for the comment , and I have heard that before ... I would just like to say though that there is only one line that is the same and that is 'Fire or Ice' and with that even being the title of this poem I find this analysis a little unfair.
 
wizad said...
Jun. 1, 2016 at 11:15 am
a good poem but, there are a few lines that are similar to the poem fire or ice by robert frost.
 
smilingsandra said...
May 31, 2016 at 3:14 pm
Why isn't this in the mag????????
 
KMG28 said...
May 24, 2016 at 4:03 pm
I agree with all of the other comments! It sounds like it could be one of the classics in the future. Thank you for leaving me breathless.
 
lauren_christieee said...
Apr. 28, 2016 at 11:44 am
This is so amazing, you captured such complex feelings and sensations perfectly.
 
Anonymous46 said...
Mar. 30, 2016 at 1:36 pm
That poem is dark.
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Mar. 14, 2016 at 2:59 am
@kate.marie , thank you! Xox
 
kate.marieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 8, 2016 at 10:11 pm
beautiful.
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Feb. 23, 2016 at 3:25 pm
@thatgirlreading , thank you ... that means a lot xox
 
thatgirlreading said...
Feb. 22, 2016 at 7:17 pm
Wow1 I which I could write a poem this good
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Feb. 11, 2016 at 12:12 pm
Thank you @AnnaHolmes1998 xox
 
AnnaHolmes1998 said...
Feb. 10, 2016 at 6:19 pm
Awwh this is so cute , really made me reconcider alot off things very very very good
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Feb. 10, 2016 at 5:59 pm
@lyrahelix , edited! Xox
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Feb. 8, 2016 at 10:53 am
@lyrahelix , firstly , thank you for your comment and also , about your comment on the spelling and grammar, how do you mean? Perhaps I could explain? Thanks xox
 
lyrahelix replied...
Feb. 8, 2016 at 6:59 pm
So as I said, the poem overall is good, but small things like "it's" instead of "its" as a possessive and "exhilerating" instead of "exhilarating" in spelling that are a bit distracting. Also, could you explain the line "and cower in sublime" to me? I don't really get it, but I have the feeling that it's important! Thanks :)
 
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