Forgive Me, But

June 23, 2014
By gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
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Almost like a
Pimple on my forehead
Scratches on my glasses
I'm bothered now

Your voice sounds like
Lawnmowers
On a perfect morning
Your mouth tells me one thing
Your eyes tell me lies
Pathetic
I won't forgive you

Sorry

But I can't love
You a day or a month
Longer than I have
Because
You're different now


The author's comments:
I wrote this for my Creative Writing final exam. We had to follow the same syllables as the poem titled Apology by William Carlos Williams and follow the theme of apologizing. I was really proud of it because I wrote it on the spot and thought I should upload it here.

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on Oct. 15 2014 at 1:12 pm
AutumnMoon BRONZE, Lebanon, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"We see our better selves in the eyes of those who love us." -Cassandra Clare

Out of all of your pieces that I have read so far, I like this one the best. It was truely beautiful and I look forward to reading more of your work. I hope you got a good grade on this in your creative writing class. Wonderful! 5/5

on Oct. 13 2014 at 10:38 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is wonderful. In sme ways, I can rather connect. You really do have a talent and ligh in you, and you are talented and wonderful. :) You do have such, a beautiful way of writing. Thank you, so much for sharing this. You wre just honest and your poem is full of emotion. :) Thank you again. 

on Jun. 29 2014 at 3:13 pm
Popcornjazz SILVER, Gahana, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Live life while you can

Wow I loved it it was deep

on Jun. 29 2014 at 3:05 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

I loved this! Great emotion! XD

on Jun. 25 2014 at 10:42 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Glad i could help :)

gboo12 SILVER said...
on Jun. 25 2014 at 7:06 am
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 18 comments
thank you so much. it means a lot to me! now that I am looking at it, the title doesn't fit (you are right). It didn't have a title to begin with so I just came up with something quick. Thank you so much for your feedback 

on Jun. 25 2014 at 3:02 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Like the emotion in this :) only critisizm is that i think you could have u used 'forgive me, but' in the poem. other than that, great!




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