Aligned

June 22, 2014
By gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
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Your teeth
Aligned
Not perfectly
But (perfect)
Like the way
Stars are (aligned)

Jumbled up
Some (looked) different
Like The Others
More yellow with light
More white with darkness

They were not
Ideal or
Flawless or
Ones that someone wished for

But the thing about stars
Is that they are not perfect
But we wish upon them anyways
Like I wish upon them

Hoping that one day
Your teeth
Will be clenching
My lower lip
Pulling me back
In
For another kiss



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on Oct. 16 2014 at 10:27 am
AutumnMoon BRONZE, Lebanon, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"We see our better selves in the eyes of those who love us." -Cassandra Clare

I really liked this poem. It was playful and fun the way you compared someone's teeth to the stars. I really liked it. I didn't quite understand why some words were in parentheses though. Overall, nicely done!

on Oct. 13 2014 at 11:01 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Haha, this is absolutely fantastic and wonderful. :) I love the whole idea and creativity. It's just amazing. :) It's just sweet and creative and just ... phenomenal. :) You are an amazing writer and person. You do have and talent and light in you. Thank you so much, for sharing this. :)

on Jun. 29 2014 at 3:06 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Wow,,, this was fantastic!!!!!

midnightwoah said...
on Jun. 28 2014 at 4:09 pm
midnightwoah, Monett, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"We accept the love we think we deserve." -Stephen Chbosky

I like how you made me go back from thinking about teeth to stars. I never saw the similarities before like how they are not all bright. I keep re-reading the fourth stanza- keep writing!

gboo12 SILVER said...
on Jun. 28 2014 at 3:21 pm
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
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thank you so much. i appreciate your opinion very much!

gboo12 SILVER said...
on Jun. 28 2014 at 3:20 pm
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
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thank you so much. really means a lot when others enjoy my work like you do :) thank you again!

on Jun. 28 2014 at 1:02 pm
WinterRose76 SILVER, Ok., Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Arise and be all that you dream - Flyleaf

This poem deserves five stars for creativity! I have never read a poem comparing teeth to stars. What an interesting idea! Very original and beautifully written. :)

on Jun. 25 2014 at 3:03 am
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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This is breautiful :) i like your use of parentheses and emphasis of the teeth not being perfect, but being perfect because of that


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