Do You See Me?

March 14, 2013
By EnnaGirl SILVER, Sacramento, California
EnnaGirl SILVER, Sacramento, California
9 articles 2 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to see in the world
- Ghandi


Darkness will bloom
As you walk by
Rupturing my heart
Can you see it burst?
The inky blackness
Spreading
Spilling over my fingertips
Clouding my breath
Dripping to the floor
Your touch leaves me wanting
Leaves me breathless
But the shadow is consuming
No one talks
No one looks
I am drifting
Sinking
Into the dark cloud
I am alone
Black mist dampens the air
Moistening my lips
Swirling fragments of glass
Shatter against my skin
As the voices drift away
Fading into the distance
Never ending silence
As you walk by
But do you see me?



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x_rbdf GOLD said...
on May. 4 2013 at 12:51 am
x_rbdf GOLD, Augusta, Georgia
17 articles 1 photo 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
He who faces give no light shall never become a star

I loved it !!!! Beautifuly dark.It really left me thinking  1000%

on Apr. 27 2013 at 10:45 am
Tabitha1233 PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 6 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
I would rather live my life as if there is a God and die to find out there isn't, than live my life as if there isn't and die to find out there is. Albert Camus

Great poem! Thwere's alot of depth and meaning!

on Apr. 26 2013 at 11:03 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

i agree with hte puncutaion but way to be deep and intense

on Apr. 19 2013 at 10:14 pm
MissLizzieGirl GOLD, Arvada, Colorado
16 articles 6 photos 66 comments
I like it but I suggest more punctuation. Just play around with it.

on Apr. 19 2013 at 3:34 pm
MeggieMills SILVER, Baltimore, Maryland
9 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
I write...so therefor I am a Writer.

This is such beautiful work... I love it. The same meaning is in my heart too.

victorious- said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 8:04 am
victorious-, Karachi, Other
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
how r u ever goona reach da stars if u will not get of the ground

awesome...............well done..........

on Apr. 17 2013 at 10:36 pm
ZaZaGoober BRONZE, Hayward, California
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you are and say what you feel
Because those who matter don't mind
And those who mind dont matter







- Doctor Seuss

This poem makes me sigh and I mean that in agood way :) Your description is wicked and and you should definately write more.

swat17 SILVER said...
on Apr. 17 2013 at 9:20 pm
swat17 SILVER, Mineral, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 34 comments
I love the imagery, terrific job! 5/5

on Apr. 17 2013 at 9:07 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

I know how you feel, but  keep it up i love how your poem went

on Apr. 11 2013 at 5:22 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
1 article 0 photos 274 comments

Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

i luv it please keep writing more

on Apr. 6 2013 at 8:18 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 426 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

I agree, the flow is very good.  I really love the imagery and word choice.  Very, very good poem!

on Mar. 31 2013 at 12:31 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

keeo writing that was really good :3 i loved the flow

ZainabS SILVER said...
on Mar. 31 2013 at 12:30 pm
ZainabS SILVER, Karachi, Other
5 articles 3 photos 14 comments
Keep writing man, thats really good :D




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