when I lay my body down MAG

January 28, 2013
By migwam ELITE, Tumwater, Washington
migwam ELITE, Tumwater, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Never let the future disturb you. You will meet it, if you have to, with the same weapons of reason which today arm you against the present." --Marcus Aurelius


when I lay my body down
in forgetland
cold in mountains, soft in skin
and I begin
to feel the ghostly open palms
of happier days
the gold glint in a riverstream feel as
If I'm finding
something precious
and before it floats away
I'll catch the hand and touch you
as you touched me
in the waking heat of nightmares
thin fingers in my hair that never cared
I could not stand to be alone
and I remember you
when we were taller than our shadows
and felt stronger than our habits
and were freer than our racing hearts
and softer than our soft remarks
I was in the rain
and talked to you for hours
I will remember you
and every night until I'm better
I will feel your
ghostly open palms
forgiving me.



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Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 4 2014 at 4:04 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

somehow i missed this poem winning the teen ink award. belated one year congrats, friend. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 17 2013 at 12:55 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Oh do. It's such a fiery word. And I'm gonna take as if I failed in interpreting this one. Right? Kinda.

migwam ELITE said...
on May. 16 2013 at 9:17 pm
migwam ELITE, Tumwater, Washington
240 articles 20 photos 152 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never let the future disturb you. You will meet it, if you have to, with the same weapons of reason which today arm you against the present." --Marcus Aurelius

"ardent". I'ma use that word a lot from now on.

migwam ELITE said...
on May. 16 2013 at 9:16 pm
migwam ELITE, Tumwater, Washington
240 articles 20 photos 152 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never let the future disturb you. You will meet it, if you have to, with the same weapons of reason which today arm you against the present." --Marcus Aurelius

It's more like... "When I fall asleep ('forgetland'=subconscious state), I'm able to imagine that you've forgiven me, because in forgetting myself and my conscious state, I can remember our better times, and I will hold on to these memories and possibly try to forgive myself in the meantime." :P

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 16 2013 at 6:44 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Hmmm.... Is it about a lover who's losed their lover and feels some regret but believes that that person will forgive him or her when she or he lays their body down in "forgetland"? Beautiful word there. And everywhere else too. Just the imagery and the ardent love throughout. Pretty awesome. I forgot I had tagged it a while ago as one of my favorites. I have a slow and forgetful mind. 5 stars as always. 

on Feb. 3 2013 at 6:57 pm
FlannelSkin PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
23 articles 6 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If faces are different when lit from above or below – what is a face? What is anything?" - William Golding, "Lord of the Flies"

Dude I've been reading your stuff for like an hour. Hooked.




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