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Magestic emperor

July 7, 2011
By purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Glimmering colors in the sky,
Aquamarine locked in his eye,
His rainbow joins a jolly green,
The majestic creature strides with beam,
With a secret so brilliant,
Delicate shimmies, Oh so radiant,
Dazzling gems in its eye,
Gazing up in the sky,
With its stunning quills
So exquisite as treasure,
A vibrant shawl hiding pleasure,
Beyond this quilt…
Is a Peacock built



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on Jan. 16 2013 at 3:47 pm
In_Love_with_Writing GOLD, Easton, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me." Phillipians 4:13

Oooh pretty description! Nice job! Can you comment and rate some of my stories?

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on Sep. 27 2012 at 8:51 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Wow! I like this a lot! Great job! Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!

on Mar. 17 2012 at 10:39 pm
Sarri2014 SILVER, Hermon, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Some achieve greatness, while others have greatness thrust upon them.

Your word choice is so good and you paint such a wonderful picture. I love the title as well. For me that's the hardest part, how to really grab a reader with the title, and you nailed it. Check my poems out too!

on Sep. 19 2011 at 5:07 pm

excellent! fantistic use of imagery and descriptive words, this is just such a pretty poem and it flows so well :)

i hate to sound like a total user by using your poem to ask for feedback on my own work, but will you please cheack out my poem Imagination, and maybe some of my other stuff too?? i would so appreciate feedback from you, and anybody else :)


on Aug. 31 2011 at 8:00 pm
callie15 BRONZE, North Plains, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"I dreamed I was a butterfly, flitting around in the sky; then I awoke. Now I wonder: Am I a man who dreamt of being a butterfly, or am I a butterfly dreaming that I am a man?"
-Chuang Tzu

"No man with a good car needs to be justified!"
-Wise Blood

Wonderful. I could see it quite well, and it was lovely. Great job :)

on Aug. 29 2011 at 6:06 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Lovely, very imaginative and graphic. 

on Aug. 6 2011 at 2:32 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

Sweet! It's so beautiful!

on Aug. 4 2011 at 12:16 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
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Beautiful imagery!

on Aug. 4 2011 at 8:08 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Thanks isabelled12

isabelleD12 said...
on Aug. 1 2011 at 2:17 pm
Wow! This is unbelievable! Great work!

on Aug. 1 2011 at 2:16 pm
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Thank You so Much! I checked out your poems and they are amazing!

on Aug. 1 2011 at 1:29 pm
ThisBeautifulDisaster GOLD, Wall, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Love Never Fails. <3

The imagery in this is beautiful. I love it.

You should check out my poems too.


on Jul. 31 2011 at 3:25 pm
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Thank so much! Teenink isa great way to experience writing so come join and write!!

lele27 said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 3:24 pm
I really enjoyed this. You are a good writer. Great job taking such experience and using it to spark creativity.

on Jul. 31 2011 at 3:21 pm
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Thank You so Much!

kypanda said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 10:42 am
You have tons of description about color...it really presents a vivid image. I can picture what you're talking about so well. Thank you for sharing.

on Jul. 30 2011 at 12:26 pm
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Thank You!

on Jul. 30 2011 at 11:11 am
EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM, Santa Barbara, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Be careful what you set your heart upon - for it will surely be yours.'
James A. Baldwin

Another beautiful poem but I think it would be better without the last line. I think it throws off the poem's rhythm.

on Jul. 25 2011 at 10:56 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Do you like this poem??

on Jul. 17 2011 at 9:50 am
purplequeen BRONZE, Boston, Massachusetts
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Thank You!!