Outsidesounds MAG

January 20, 2010
By Mopsicle BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
Mopsicle BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It wasn't me and I'll never do it again"


I was sitting in my bedroom
Listening to
outsidesounds.
Fearing you were sleeping
I didn't make a
sound.
I kept quiet
for what I thought
was
longenough.
I called, you didn't
answer.
I'm waiting.
Still wait
ing.
Hello?


The author's comments:
All capitalizations, punctuations, etc. are just the way I wanted them for reasons you can interpret whatever way you'd like. :)

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villain123 said...
on Aug. 28 2012 at 2:34 pm
villain123, Bridgewater, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm okay with war as long as nobody gets hurt."

The unusual structure, like words combining and the split of "wait" and "ing" helped me set a rhythm. I don't know if the pauses and beats of the poem are the same for you, but it was fun to imagine how it would be spoken out loud.

on Mar. 10 2011 at 9:09 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Love it. :)


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