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Liv.HarrisThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Sep. 29 at 2:53 pm

Hello everyone! I am coming to notice I haven't been getting any editor's choice lately, where I used to get them all the time. I feel like I have grown as a writer, and don't see why I suddenly stopped receiving Editor's Choice awards. If you have any feedback for me based on my work, and why you think I am not getting any awards, let me know. 
PS if you leave a helpful comment I will read and comment on something of yours!

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kenderle replied...
Oct. 17 at 11:42 am

Hello Liv.Harris. I read your poem What I am. To start off, I like the metaphor of the speaker as a bee finding a flower on a sidewalk. A bee's goal is to find flowers just like a person has a goal of finding themselves or someone. I also like the alliteration of perosnality, place, and path. To continue, I like the auditory imagery of a "fractured beat". As a percussionist, the different beats, even fractured beats, make a song. The speaker is a part of the whole thing. However, I believe there should be more details in some lines such as "I am fake" and "I can break".Your second stanza and the last are very abstract and aren't necessarily needed. We already know those details from the stanzas with the metaphors. Thank you.

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