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My heart does not beat for you anymore.
It powers down, ensuring no emotion.
I dare not surrender to your poison potion,
But flee from wounds which time could not restore.
What a pedestal that has been set,
An unyielding power coarse hands caress,
Fear lurks beyond confidence, I confess.
My own faults shall remain my own regrets.
I bestowed you with height, attesting me weak,
Recoiling behind acts of defiance,
Gives notion your battle will not succeed.
I accept our relations, we need not speak,
My heart need not beat, nor inquire alliance,
Tonight I impede, recede, and concede.

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EEKgirl said...
Feb. 20 at 12:04 am:
It sounds like a dance. I love it, it is a flawed beauty. Please, keep writing. Rhyme scheme schmime scheme.
 
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Elizabeth-of-rohan This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 29, 2013 at 3:20 pm:
beautiful.
 
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Gavin S. said...
Apr. 29, 2013 at 2:16 pm:
It was awesome
 
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AShiftInLife said...
Jul. 25, 2011 at 8:19 pm:
Beautiful. Its powerful. I can feel the emotion- that's what I love about poetry. Putting just a few words on the screen and still being able to show people how you feel is an art I'd love to learn someday. Very good job.
 
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Youngshakespeare18 said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 2:52 pm:
I agree with your description. Poetry is better flawed because if you have to plan it out where is the feeling. You did amazing
 
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IamtheshyStargirl said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 2:34 pm:
Wow, some of those lines really spoke to me about a friendship I once had.
 
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DarkAngelNinjaXP said...
May 20, 2011 at 9:54 am:
Wow. Just... wow. This is absolutely amazing. 
 
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Zero_Black said...
Mar. 30, 2011 at 5:35 pm:
What d'you mean your teacher won't like it? It's really good! Even if you didn't follow the assignment, I think it's really, really good! >:}
 
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Touchstone said...
Jan. 23, 2011 at 10:56 pm:
This is IT !!!! 
 
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GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 23, 2011 at 3:28 pm:
Wow. This is so beautiful and strong.. The word choice is simply... excellent. A very inspiring sonnet - I'm going to try to write one I think and I'll let you know when its done. Would you comment on it? I'd love your opinion. Thanks! Keep writing! :)
 
MeganCahill This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 23, 2011 at 5:06 pm :
Of course I would comment!! Thank you so much for yours!! I appreciate it and it means a great deal. Let me know I would love to see yours :D
 
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Tuesday said...
Jan. 23, 2011 at 3:35 am:
Better off flawed, indeed. You can tell how much thought and feeling is behind this.
 
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meli-meli said...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 3:41 pm:
WOW! SENSATIONAL!
 
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MeganCahill This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 2:40 pm:
Thank you! I really appreciate the constructive criticism, sometimes even more so than compliments. 
 
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dylaan said...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 2:05 pm:
This poem has very meaningful words. It is written gracefully, yet has a sort of depressing tone. In the first line, it starts off with "My heart does not beat for you anymore". This line starts the poem with a mood that is about romance. The beginning is well written. The lines seem to go on with commas and just connect to each other which can be redundant. 
 
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SideraCaeli said...
Nov. 3, 2010 at 10:15 pm:
I loved it! My favorite part is, "An unyielding power coarse hands caress, Fear lurks beyond confidence, I confess. My own faults shall remain my own regrets.  All in all, it was a great poem. Poems are written the way they are meant to be, I'm glad that you didn't change it into what your teacher wanted!
 
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ebony_and_irony said...
Oct. 27, 2010 at 5:45 pm:
I'm very glad that you decided to go with this rather than throwing it out because it didn't fit a particular rhyme scheme. Good job.
 
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Sarahlee said...
Oct. 5, 2010 at 8:48 am:
WOW! Really good! Please read mine, I'd love to hear your opinion!
 
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Grasshopper007 said...
Apr. 25, 2010 at 11:12 am:
Despite the rhyming, I thought it was good! It's difficult to write a really good piece of work with rhyming involved- you're right, sometimes things, like people are better off flawed! Congrats!
 
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RedHuntingHat said...
Feb. 7, 2010 at 7:25 pm:
This is a really good sonnet. I have read so many on this website that are not correct sonnets, and I am refreshed to see a proper one! Thank you for showing the Teen Ink world what a real sonnet is. Bravo
 
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