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You take my breath away

I am suffocating, drowning in my own sorrow

Lost in the rubble of my soul

Time stands still in my despair, with no hope of tomorrow

While images of mirth, and merriment swallow me whole

Nobody notices the pain that lies within

I hear the thuds of the rabblement passing me by

This is the jail sentence, for my greatest sin

The red color of life, from my blood does it fly

It would seem I am at my wits end

The sounds of their feet drifting
away like the sun when it sets

All because my true feelings, I would not befriend

And now I am lifeless, having paid off my debts.

And I deserved it all; all because I wouldn’t say

“You take my breath away.”




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SongBird04This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 3, 2012 at 11:39 am:
this one is so good too! They all are! I like the style of this one. :)
 
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bagley777This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 15, 2012 at 1:12 am:
The last 2 lines are my favorite(: A lot of meaning in these words.
 
Mr.DedicatedDeterminationThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 15, 2012 at 9:28 pm :
Thanks soooo much!!! No one has every took the time to read as much stuff as you did. You're the best :) Come by nonfiction sometime so I can formally thank you :P
 
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midnightsorrowsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 8, 2012 at 3:39 pm:
HOLY COW!!!! Thats amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!! Never stop writing!! <3
 
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MadelynHopeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 3, 2012 at 7:11 pm:
Danggggg. That was GOOD. Very deep, descriptive, attention-catching (and keeping). Agreed with Ruby, it moved along great and the rhythem was perfect. Keep writing :)
 
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Ruby-Paige-RoseThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 3, 2012 at 5:16 pm:
The rhythem was great.
 
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