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The Wall

Remember that wall i had to build?
When we first me to protect from all harm,
All of your promises never fulfilled,
I got caught up in your devilish charm.

Well over time the wall would then crumble,
Anger, deceit and all problems let in,
My vision was cloud, my feet start to stumble,
Couldn't get this feeling from under my skin.

But the wall we both had tried to rebuild,
was weaker the it ever was before,
Aspirations were still left unfilled,
I should have known you would walk out the door.

I now have nothing more to build with or give, so
please help me move on, i don't want to relive...




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Grace. said...
Apr. 17, 2012 at 7:46 pm:
I liked how the plot of the poem thickened in the second stanza... I can sort of see the relationship deteriorate "over time" when the "wall would then crumble". The great thing? I can relate to it. You did a good job!
 
katinthehat replied...
Apr. 17, 2012 at 8:06 pm :
Aww.. thanks so much!!!
 
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SilverSunThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 15, 2012 at 5:05 pm:
Woah! awesome poem.... i love the metaphor with the wall and everything. the first line totally sucked me in. Sorry to jump all over the place but i have so many thoughts i just have to get down. Ah!
 
katinthehat replied...
Apr. 15, 2012 at 6:10 pm :
hha awe thanks... i  just write what i feel lol
 
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somerandomperson said...
Apr. 15, 2012 at 4:17 pm:
I know how you feel lately ive been building walls to keep out emotions so i wouldnt fall far if i was droppped.
 
katinthehat replied...
May 16, 2012 at 1:00 pm :
aww im so sorry, i can totally relate, but i think what i realized when i wrote this peom is that building walls and keeping everything inside is the worst thing to do, you just need to be honest with yourself and pull through so that thinks dont pile up too far and get blown up into something way out of proportion. Stay strong :) and keep writing!
 
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