Mules Are Bigger Than Horses

The sky is turquoise blue, the air is clear.
A meeting of minds, alike as can be.
Their lives so differnet, parting draws near.
Severed already by a figurative sea.

working in unison as hearts are bound.
They speak together 'til the job is done.
Ever linked, though proximity unwound.
What does that matter, if memory won?

Memory won, a treasure of the heart.
Their brains vibrate still of roads unsung.
But they are grateful, cherishing the art
beautiful, on physical walls unhung.

Doubting am I, that they meet again still,
but the heart hopes on, as it always will.





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leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 9:21 am
I agree with Boo, this is really good ^_^ my only problem is maybe placing commas where some of the periods are, just for better flow. Keep up the great work!
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Oct. 20, 2011 at 4:34 pm

Haha XD I think I'm a bit too timid at times... 

That is an idea, though I've kinda found that I like the periods, it's like the narrator is pausing after every line to let them ring out in an echoingly-silent room. 

Le hannon, once again :)

 
BoosflashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 12:58 am
yeah, um... I dont know where you get that whole "omg, i suck cause i never wrote a sonnet before, omg i dont think gonna their like me." you can take that attitude and shove it down the river and make yourself an omelette cause your freakin awesome.
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 11:50 am

I think I shall, I guess I don't have much of a choice anyway <Eyebrow waggle> 

If Boo says so, I really must be. 

Thank you very much.

 
BoosflashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 8:01 pm
tu es tres....hmm.....bon.
 
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 30, 2011 at 5:53 pm
The words of this sonnet are so very clear and honest, and yet I am still left with the feeling that there is a lot more to the story than I can presently see. It's been a while since I've looked at your poetry, and this has reminded me of your extreme creativity when manipulating your thoughts. Well done, Stargirl!
 
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 30, 2011 at 5:54 pm

Also, the last two lines do a remarkable job of concluding the poem.

I am, as always, of the belief that no goodbyes are permanent.

I love it when the heart hopes on, though doubt is feasting  on the mind.

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 4:13 pm

Rim Hannaid, it is good to be reading your comments once again. You see far, a talent which few posess, and even fewer are able to articulate.

These meetings of alike minds can happen anywhere, at any time.

 
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 8:43 pm

Quoth the Raven "Nevermore."

Ha, I've waited so long to say that.

Indeed. One strange thing is: like minds often seem able to sense each other's presence, yet so seldom do they meet! I very much hope that you can see your friend again.

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jul. 4, 2011 at 8:24 pm

I'm glad you finally had the opportunity :)

Thank you, your words mean much.

 
Anna-Akua said...
Jun. 29, 2011 at 10:26 pm
Wow, this poem is pure beauty. I wish that special meeting will become  lifetime occassion :)
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jun. 29, 2011 at 11:07 pm
Thank you, for your praise and your wish, Anna :)
 
Aderes18 said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 8:45 pm

This poem is really beautiful and it relates to me in a very personal way! :) 

This poem reminds me of the song 

Lift Every Voice and Sing

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jun. 27, 2011 at 12:56 pm
Thanks, Aderes :) As always, it's a pleasure to read your comments.
 
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