Mysterious Lights in the Night Sky

A trillion and one stars shine so bright
Always right there at the end of the day
Sparkling and twinkling-what a sight!
Gazing up at them, just wishing to stay

Is this where the people go when they die?
If so, why wear black and heavily cry?





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Trudi95 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 10:49 pm
Thank you so much! I really like your work also...especially 'In dreams I dream.' I really liked the line " And the tears too often too soon Are kissed good night by the opal moon"
You are also a great writer.
 
Jane_P This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 8:55 pm

I like how you portrayed wonderment of the world. I can imagine a small child gazing up at the sky in simple awe. It brought back memories of me looking at the night sky. At the end when you compared the twinkling stars to tears and black to mourning, I thought it was really powerful. It put a mood on the poem that made it special at the end. It really makes you think.

 

Five star.

 
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