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We were so wrong,
That we made it right.
We slept through the day,
And only talked at night.
We never told the truth,
We only lied.
We always laughed,
When we should have cried.
We were never bland,
We had to add spice.
We were always naughty,
But rarely nice.
We used the words hate,
Instead of using love.
We fell into a ditch,
Instead of rising above.




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dylonmichael said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 10:57 am:
i can definetly see why it didnt work
 
lion101 replied...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 9:34 am :
i like ur poem
 
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justjessie said...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 4:06 am:
i lu lu lu love this. very good.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 1:47 pm :
Thanx :) I'm glad ya like id:)
 
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Danielle N. said...
Oct. 18, 2009 at 7:11 pm:
this is wonderful! good job keep writing!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Nov. 7, 2009 at 10:35 am :
Thanx:) i appreciate ur opinion;)
 
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ayeBNFx3 said...
Oct. 18, 2009 at 6:47 pm:
amazing :)))
 
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BradleyCounts said...
Oct. 17, 2009 at 11:19 pm:
Good poem.....You have great potential
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Nov. 7, 2009 at 10:28 am :
Oh thanks:)
 
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Hay_Wire This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 17, 2009 at 10:06 pm:
heh....i know how that one goes. i love the poem. it flows great, the rhyme works perfectly. not forced at all. i have problems with that....
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Oct. 19, 2009 at 1:48 pm :
Thanks I'm glad u enjoyed it!!
 
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Jordon. said...
Oct. 17, 2009 at 4:49 am:
amazing peom.
well written :)
 
.rauha replied...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 7:39 am :
As bluemagnet said: "Thnx for ur feedback:) but honestly i'm kinda tired of everyone talking about how the poems r in the "wrong" categories....doesn't the content n flow of the poem matter more?"
I agree about the flow of the poem, but a sonnet has a specific form. You cannot call your poem a sonnet if it is not. I like your poem, it's beautiful, but it really isn't a sonnet. I've written them before, and they are a tough form to master.
 
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