Dysfunctional

October 12, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


We were so wrong,
That we made it right.
We slept through the day,
And only talked at night.
We never told the truth,
We only lied.
We always laughed,
When we should have cried.
We were never bland,
We had to add spice.
We were always naughty,
But rarely nice.
We used the words hate,
Instead of using love.
We fell into a ditch,
Instead of rising above.


The author's comments:
This poem was inspired by a previous relationship... can you see why it didn't work out?!?

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on Oct. 20 2009 at 11:40 am
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
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very good indeed!!

lov it.

keep writing.

ya i just got dumped preety much

reminds me of this!!

on Oct. 19 2009 at 8:36 pm
cool poem, i like it

on Oct. 19 2009 at 7:15 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This reminds me of me and my friend who's a boy who I kind of like, but I have the feeling that it's just we're not quite mature enough yet, and that's okay (I'm 14). Anyways, this poem is really, really good, and I love it, from title to ending sentence, which, by the way, was great. Could you check out some of my work? I'd love to hear what you think!

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on Oct. 19 2009 at 4:22 pm
seapenguin, Healdsburg, California
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Favorite Quote:
I'm a super hero, but with no powers or motivation.

Been there, done that. it's like you wrote about my previous relationship. Haha. Anyway, nice work! It was really good.

on Oct. 19 2009 at 3:23 pm
Charliieee BRONZE, Dorchester, Other
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I had a similar relationship. You really captured the true essence. I love it. (:

on Oct. 19 2009 at 1:48 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thanks I'm glad u enjoyed it!!

on Oct. 19 2009 at 1:47 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thanx :) I'm glad ya like id:)

on Oct. 19 2009 at 10:57 am
dylonmichael GOLD, El Dorado, Kansas
10 articles 3 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
i have two one is "live life as if it were your last day on earth" and two is "never make some one your everything because when they leave you you have nothing"

i can definetly see why it didnt work

on Oct. 19 2009 at 4:06 am
justjessie GOLD, Lakeland, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
if i cant be something to someone then i want to be nothing to everyone

i lu lu lu love this. very good.

on Oct. 18 2009 at 7:11 pm
StandardToaster PLATINUM, Pasadena, California
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Favorite Quote:
I don't suffer from insanity; I enjoy ever minute of it."

this is wonderful! good job keep writing!

on Oct. 18 2009 at 6:47 pm
ayeBNFx3 SILVER, Bronx, New York
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amazing :)))

on Oct. 17 2009 at 11:19 pm
BradleyCounts SILVER, Lagrange, Georgia
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Good poem.....You have great potential

on Oct. 17 2009 at 10:06 pm
Hay_Wire PLATINUM, Independence, Missouri
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heh....i know how that one goes. i love the poem. it flows great, the rhyme works perfectly. not forced at all. i have problems with that....

on Oct. 17 2009 at 4:49 am
ThereIsAlwaysHope GOLD, Belfast, Other
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Favorite Quote:
'Miles to go before I sleep'
- Robert Frost

amazing peom.

well written :)


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