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We were so wrong,
That we made it right.
We slept through the day,
And only talked at night.
We never told the truth,
We only lied.
We always laughed,
When we should have cried.
We were never bland,
We had to add spice.
We were always naughty,
But rarely nice.
We used the words hate,
Instead of using love.
We fell into a ditch,
Instead of rising above.



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LuckyThree said...
May 3, 2010 at 8:27 am:
pretty simple, but solid.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
May 11, 2010 at 3:06 pm :
thanx:) :D
 
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GreenLover said...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 11:07 pm:
i love the way it ryhmes. and i could see why i didnt work out. nice job keep writting. would you mind taking a look at my poem called my child, my son. i really appreciate the feedback
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
May 11, 2010 at 3:06 pm :
Thank u n ofcoarse i'll check it out:)
 
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Sweet2bme2 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 12:09 pm:
this was really good. it had a nice rhyme scheme and i understood exactly what it was saying
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:18 pm :
Yay I'm glad:) Thank u I appreciate your comment:)
 
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xlindseyx166 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 12:00 pm:
i love this! i know exactly what you mean by this! keep writing you're so good! (:
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:18 pm :
Thanx lol I love this poem too:)
 
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Kdominick11 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 11:57 am:
i like the rhyme scheme in yourr poem
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:17 pm :
Thanx:) I do love rhyming!
 
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Scrappydu said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 11:45 am:
Love the poem, keep writing more!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:17 pm :
Thank u:) I will keep writtin I have many more poems on here u should check em out some time;)
 
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Farah.123 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 9:03 am:
Its great, reminds me of some of my friends, (>_<)!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:16 pm :
thankz...haha lol tell good luck for me
 
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xxCMMx16 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 9:01 am:
nice poem i liked how you used something you went threw to create the emotion that you did.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:16 pm :
Thanx...ya even though it was a crazy relationship at least I got a pretty good poem out of it lol
 
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ryne8 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 8:53 am:
i like this poem. good jod
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:15 pm :
thank you:)
 
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Coran said...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 6:20 pm:
i love it!!! and can most definitely see why it didnt work...
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 21, 2010 at 12:14 pm :
Thank you! Ya it's quite obvious lol but atleast I got a good poem out of it lol
 
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RedHuntingHat said...
Feb. 7, 2010 at 7:19 pm:
I don't think this is a sonnet. They have to have 10 syllables per line.
 
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