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Take my Heart and Break It

Take my broken heart,
and rip it from my chest.
Steal away my soul,
and finally put me to rest.

I dreamt about you day and night,
and I wanted you to be mine.
You watched me in my hardest days,
and sometimes you watched me shine.

Every time I saw you,
my heart would skip a beat.
Every time you said my name,
I would spring out of my seat.

I loved you with my heart and soul.
I loved you year after year.
But something always kept us apart:
our confusion, our chances, our fear.

But now there is no hope for us,
we are doomed to be apart.
Maybe I won't feel the pain
if you completely break my heart.




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BrokenBree said...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 2:13 pm:
THIS WAS AMAZING!! Although I thought sonnets were 4 stanzas of 4 and a couplet summarizing? I also believe "dreamt" is incorrect spelling. Dreampt is correct. Other than that; WELL DONE!!
 
forgive_forget replied...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 1:23 am :
This is amazing all round!!!
 
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Undiscovered16 said...
Nov. 16, 2011 at 8:58 pm:
Story of my life, right here! Great job, you're an amazing writer! I'm sorry it will never work for you and him.. I know just how you feel.
 
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dark_armor1 said...
Nov. 16, 2011 at 2:49 pm:
i like it! good job :)
 
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petleavitt said...
Nov. 10, 2011 at 2:24 pm:

i toto relate!! check me out and comment plz!!

 

 
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horsewriter4evr said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 8:24 pm:
love this poem i think it can relate to so many people! I love the theme of it too!
 
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Emmy88 said...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 6:33 pm:

This was so amazing! I read the 1st stanza and was in love with the poem

 

 
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SqueakyLove said...
Oct. 29, 2011 at 2:37 pm:
This is so good! I Love It!!  I can so relate to it! GREAT WORK!  
 
dreamer_believer replied...
Oct. 31, 2011 at 12:59 pm :
thank you sooo much! :))
 
experienced replied...
Nov. 1, 2011 at 1:09 pm :

i am a victim of your beauty i have fallen in love with this peace its crazy because i can so relate to this right this almost made me cry

 

 
dreamer_believer replied...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 12:19 pm :
i'm sooo glad to hear you got emotionally invovled in this :) haha. thanks soo much!
 
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TheCapturedBatThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 24, 2011 at 6:23 pm:
I have just gone through something like this, and it is extremely painful. Your poem is so forlorn and beautiful.
 
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TheCapturedBatThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 24, 2011 at 2:24 pm:
I can definately sympathize with this poem. I have just been through an experience like this, and it is extremely painful. Your poem is beautiful and moving.
 
dreamer_believer replied...
Oct. 31, 2011 at 12:59 pm :
sadly... this situation is HORRIBLE! i'm glad you enjoyed my poem though :) hopefully you got something out of it :)
 
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nikkigonefishin said...
Oct. 22, 2011 at 5:27 pm:
This is really good! I am currently in the position of having a crush on my best friend and I found comfort in your poem. Thnx and keep writing!
 
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silver47 said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 11:29 pm:

good description reminds me of bad times and how they got better

 

 
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XxilybbyxX said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 4:27 pm:

Beautiful! you have a gift!! :)

 

 
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musiccrazy said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 11:06 am:
really good!
 
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originalpadawon25 said...
Oct. 2, 2011 at 3:36 am:
whoa...that was scary good
 
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theJew said...
Sept. 18, 2011 at 1:45 pm:
amazing poem i really could feel the emotion in it, i dont know what else to say because im awstruck by the intensity and the emotion shown in this poem
 
dreamer_believer replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 3:48 pm :
thank you soo much! i'm glad you enjoyed it :) sadly, sometimes some of the best writing comes from a broken heart! thanks soo much for your comment :)
 
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