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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.



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nauset.johnson said...
Feb. 7, 2012 at 7:31 pm:
Whats good about this poem is that it will always be true, like much of Shakespeare's work. Although like his, it's not in Shakespearean Sonnet form, or any other form I am aware of. With that said, I think this poem is great and the rhyming that it does have is perfect. Personally, I am not a fan of poems that every line rhymes somewhere; I like ones where there is a little rhyme here and there, giving it a definite song sense. Overalll, a job well done.
 
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TrishhG said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 12:55 pm:
This poem was really good and I feel relevant as well. I really do feel as if it describes my relationship with some people. Really Good :)
 
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DaiDaii said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 11:07 pm:
Hey, This is really good this is my first time on the site and I already see awesome things you have a talent!! Cherish it
 
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Ella1 said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 12:09 pm:
This is a great poem and I can definitely relate :) Would you mind reading my poem A Pink Watch, Portal, and Perpetual Sea?
 
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chloe_garrett said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 8:42 am:
This poem is amazing. I can definitely relate. I'd love it if you could check out some of my poems and leave a comment and rating. I really like the way you write.
 
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Kate298 said...
Jan. 26, 2012 at 5:55 pm:
Loved this poem, I tagged it as a favorite :) I can totally relate to the topic, my poems are very similar to this one.
 
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Silver2blackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 12:17 pm:
I did enjoy it Blue, I really enjoyed the rhyming and the read !!!
 
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Call.Me.Clueless said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:35 pm:
I love this poem! It's very easy to relate to.
 
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rescuetruck607 said...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 3:46 pm:
love it!! keep up the good work!
 
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vazenitran98 said...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 1:12 pm:
Love it!What a great poem!
 
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northursday said...
Dec. 26, 2011 at 5:56 pm:
This is great, but the structure is wrong for a sonnet. I love the message, though.
 
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aurorairis said...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 6:04 pm:

I love this! It is so profound and relatable! I know exactly what you are talking about!

Please check out some of my work!

 
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TheDance said...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 3:51 pm:
I know exactly what you mean. With my exboyfriend, and my best friend it's exactly the same way. I can't stand it, and it makes me sad. It makes me remember the really good days we had together and how they used to act. I wish they still acted that way. I wish they were still the people I knew and loved.
 
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Fia-fia said...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 11:18 am:

This is a wonderful poem. I agree with wat you are saying but i also take from it something else. I am also seeing it not as a friend, but like if you had an old boyfriend or girlfriend, and things have changed. THank you!

:)

 
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MakenzieB. said...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 10:29 am:
I can totally relate to this. It's the same case as going back to school after summer's over and your friends act like they don't even know you ar want to be near you anymore. Great piece of work! Keep on writing!
 
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Dollface2012 said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 2:44 pm:
This poem is great ! The emotion it evokes is very easy to relate to. Such a short lenghted poem telling such a long story. I like this poem alot.
 
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Torri_123 said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 2:40 pm:
I can totally relate to this poem...it's a great poem
 
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GoGoGryffindor said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 2:27 pm:
This is a wonderful poem. I really like the emotion in it. This is a very relatable poem. Good job!
 
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RedDaisy said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 9:13 pm:

A very beautiful poem indeed~ Your writing style reminds me of my own in that I like to finish with the beggining. Very strong, very deep. May that person inspire you to create another poem -one where the good times of the past reappear and find a permanent place in the present-

~RedDaisy~

 
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gazbeannie said...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 5:54 pm:
Simple, yet says a lot! :)
 
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