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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.




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imaginewhirrledpeas said...
Jan. 18, 2010 at 12:03 pm:
I really related to this poem...I have a friend exactly like that....he used to be like a brother to me, sweet and nice and caring. But now he's some tail - chasing jerk according to everyone else.
I just hope that I won't find out the same way that all the other girls did. That they were right.....
 
imaginewhirrledpeas replied...
Jan. 20, 2010 at 5:43 pm :
Well thanks!!(: I hope he does.....you are a brilliant writer!
 
Jacee007 replied...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 1:50 pm :
I agree she's great:)
 
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Summer500 said...
Jan. 17, 2010 at 6:39 pm:
exactly what im going through, you described it perfectly
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 8:48 am :
I'm glad that's what I try to do with my poems:) a poems no good if it's not relatable
 
Summer500 replied...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 4:37 pm :
true that, great writing!
 
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Gina P. said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 8:32 pm:
I really liked this poem because alot of people have related to losing friends that have changed in a certain way. This poem can really relate to me because I have lost many friends too by the way they have changed.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 9:48 am :
I'm really glad you can relate to the poem:) my main goal is to be able to touch people's lives through poetry so thanx for ur comment
 
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alex9426 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 9, 2010 at 3:41 pm:
this was such an awesome poem. i loved the flow and rhyme. not sure if it's a sonnet, but i think you did an amazing job regardless. please check out my work
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 9:46 am :
Thank you so much:)
lol honestly i never kno how to classify my poems lol all I kno is they aren't free verse but what are they?lol
 
electrichearts replied...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 3:47 pm :
a sonnet has 14 lines and the structure is ABABCDCDEFEFGG. i really liked this, but it isn't exactly a sonnet. :) none the less, nice work!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 11:53 am :
Ok So like
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lol sry i rly promise im not that slow lol
 
Jacee007 replied...
Aug. 9, 2010 at 6:08 pm :
Oh my this is such an amazing poem!!! But I agree I'm not sure it's a sonnet but who says that really even matters lol
 
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BrittneyLynn said...
Jan. 9, 2010 at 2:44 pm:
Reminded me of my friend who died last summer of a drug overdose....it was very sad that such a great person could get sucked into such aweful things.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 9:45 am :
Awe I'm rly sorry about ur friend.
But I'm glad the poem touched you:)
 
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DeadlyPoppy said...
Jan. 9, 2010 at 1:12 am:
It was a very touching poem, but some of the words didn't quite flow, in my opinion. The word tarnished, specifically jumped out at me, and it didn't seem to fit. Other than that it was really good!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 9:43 am :
Thanx for ur opinion
i rly appreciate hearing how pple think whether they like my poem r not
I used the word tarnished because metal tarnishes and gold is a metal n i said "when you once had a heart of gold"
But thanx for ur opinion:)
 
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qtalli03 said...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 8:36 am:
This poem is just amazing! I can relate to this so much. It's like you are reading my mind. It's awesome how much a poem can really touch you. I read in one of your comments that your goal is to make a difference in people's lives by your writing, and I am pretty sure that you will accomplish that, especially from this poem! Your word choice was really great!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 10:33 am :
thank you so much:) ur comment was rly encouraging to me:) i love knowin i am making a difference n not just hopin it so thank u so much:) it rly touched me:)
 
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hayli:) said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 5:55 pm:
This is absolutly amazing.. poems can't get much better than this.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 10:31 am :
Awe thank u sooo much:))
 
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