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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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DeAunna said...
on Oct. 14 2011 at 10:48 am
DeAunna, Carrollton, Texas
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Very relatable, and I love the transition from points of view, has a good flow to it, and a nice topic. I really like it a lot :)

 


on Oct. 12 2011 at 4:56 am
CandyGirl636 GOLD, Searsport, Maine
11 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a lot of faverote quotes.......
LOVE PEACE AND CHICKEN GREESE <3
HAKUNA MATATA
NEVER LET THE FEAR OF STRIKNIG OUT KEEP YOU FROM PLAYING THE GAME.
Pain is weekness levaving ones body.
I'm not random you just cant think as fast as me.

This is a very nice poem. I like how everyone can relate to it.

~If someone want's to give me some feedback on my work, I would like that greatly. :) Thanks


mhafner said...
on Oct. 10 2011 at 9:36 pm
I like that you wrote a poem that relates to everyday teenage lives. We all know of somebody who has changed and you always look back at how they used to be and when you write about something that people can relate to it's a lot more enjoyable and more readers will listen. This is a simple, and beautiful poem.

purpleink GOLD said...
on Oct. 9 2011 at 9:00 pm
purpleink GOLD, Pendleton, Oregon
17 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
The early bird gets the worm but the second rat gets the cheese.

There is more to life besides increasing its speed.

wow, i can really relate to this. it's so true! love it! (if anyone could give me some much needed feedback I'd really appreciate it-thanks!)

Cianni BRONZE said...
on Oct. 7 2011 at 9:26 am
Cianni BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Nice poem it sounds like you miss someone in your life and i do too. my best friend i relate to you.

on Oct. 3 2011 at 10:41 am

this poem is very understanding because this kind of stuff happens all the time

 


2write said...
on Oct. 2 2011 at 3:31 am
2write, Dededo, Other
0 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
" I wasn't built for conformity, I was born to stand out from the crowd"
" In the end, it's not going to matter how many breaths you took but how many moment tsook your breath away:"- Chinese man
"I have tried, in my way, to be free."-Leonard Cohen

that was amazing 

2write said...
on Oct. 2 2011 at 3:30 am
2write, Dededo, Other
0 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
" I wasn't built for conformity, I was born to stand out from the crowd"
" In the end, it's not going to matter how many breaths you took but how many moment tsook your breath away:"- Chinese man
"I have tried, in my way, to be free."-Leonard Cohen

read it again 

on Sep. 26 2011 at 7:38 pm
Rosie_1030 BRONZE, Windber, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
You can tell someone there are 300 billion stars in the universe and they will believe you, but tell them there is wet paint on a bench, and they will have to touch it to be sure. ~ Unknown

This descibes the situation i'm in right now perfectly!! I lovee it! (:

Ha ha said...
on Sep. 26 2011 at 6:45 pm
It made no sense its not interested.

Carse99 said...
on Sep. 25 2011 at 3:03 am
Carse99, Paoli, Indiana
0 articles 1 photo 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Forever ago, I have slept since then

This is so touching i really like what u did with it

on Sep. 22 2011 at 7:19 am
EmiliePhillippi GOLD, Holland, Michigan
16 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
But in your hearts set apart Christ as Lord. Always be prepared to give an answer to everyone who asks you to give the reason for the hope that you have. But do this with gentleness and respect.
1 Peter 3:15 

Wow. Exactly what I'm going through RIGHT NOW! its a great poem, thank you for sharing!

on Sep. 19 2011 at 10:38 am
Lctrewyn BRONZE, Beloit, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 1 comment
i love this .

on Sep. 17 2011 at 12:27 pm
Gilbert, BRONZE, Houston, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Impossible is Impossible"

That is so true...time ages and people change

on Sep. 17 2011 at 12:11 pm
paigeturner9 PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
40 articles 0 photos 17 comments
this is amazing! So sad, but so well written :)

jaque1995 said...
on Sep. 16 2011 at 8:44 am
this poem is the best i love it :)

on Sep. 13 2011 at 10:26 am
Brianna:This is a really super good poem!!!! Valerie:super good

on Sep. 8 2011 at 12:22 pm
WeAllBurn PLATINUM, Vermilion, Ohio
24 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The weak can never forgive. Forgiveness is the attribute of the strong." ~Mahatma Gandhi

this is utterly breathtaking <3

i know exactly what you mean by this, and it just sucks. :/

please read some of my work too, i believe you would really like my poem, "Fake".


on Sep. 1 2011 at 7:33 pm
Sarah0227 BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
If your slate is clean then you can throw stones if your slate is not then leave her alone!
-Jesus Christ Superstar-

this is really mooving the exact same thing happened to me recently and your poem hit me and....i cant even find the words to explain it its really fantastic great job! :D

on Aug. 28 2011 at 6:32 am
Jenga142 BRONZE, Stoke On Trent, Other
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
all animals are equal but some are more equal than others

really moving and clever because most readers can find a way to relate to it.Fantastic,well done !!!!please checkout my work too!!!! xxxx