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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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on Nov. 22 2011 at 2:53 pm
Sonja0609 SILVER, Zuni, New Mexico
7 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you look deep enough you will see music: the heart of nature being everywhere music." -Thomas Carlyle

Amazin!

 


Melody777 GOLD said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 11:40 am
Melody777 GOLD, Tonasket, Washington
17 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's not who you are underneath, but what you do that defines you."

This was great, you put so much feeling into a short amount of space. Impressive!

on Nov. 21 2011 at 3:10 pm
EscapeSanity SILVER, Sahuache, Colorado
7 articles 1 photo 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Not all those who wander are lost
Is it better to be hurt by the raw truth, or comfortably deceived?

This is an amazing poem. Sonnets are my favorite. I love how this can relate to anyone and everyone and says so much in only a few lines. AMAZING <3

on Nov. 16 2011 at 7:24 am
Terraincognita BRONZE, North Richland Hills, Texas
4 articles 15 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
Through our hold of reality we gain morality.

good poem! But it's not in sonnet form...

sonnets are written 10 sylables by 10 lines in this rime order:

a

b

a

b

c

d

c

d

e

e


kobie1kenobi said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 9:19 am
I really did enjoy it, thank you. It relates to just about everyone, the main idea of it and all. It was extremely well-worded, the rhythm was all together, and the whole feel of it all captivates the reader. I guess you could say that it emanates good vibes. ;)

irishlass317 said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 2:43 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
0 articles 0 photos 134 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

Very Good!!!! I love it!!!! :D

 


on Nov. 10 2011 at 4:37 pm
Jinxyness SILVER, St. Louis, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"Writers write."

I cannot put words to how accurately this represents how I have felt, and still feel. So I will leave it at an enthusiatic 'well done'.

~Jinx <3


BlackRose21 said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 12:05 pm
BlackRose21, Warren, Michigan
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I totally agree. I have seen alot of this happening.

on Nov. 10 2011 at 11:32 am
Katherine_Parker BRONZE, Hillsborough, North Carolina
1 article 0 photos 3 comments
This is very good:)

on Nov. 10 2011 at 11:21 am
bakedbeans PLATINUM, Baltimore, Maryland
20 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
People often ask me "why are you so fast?" and my reply was "ask a basketball player why he or she keep making three point shots in a row or ask a football player why is he so good at breaking tackles. its practice!!! common sense idiot!!!" Charles.C

I kind of like this it's true and nice

on Nov. 8 2011 at 4:53 pm
writer101 BRONZE, Shippensburg, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Slowly but shurly.

It is good and yes i agree with it is sad.Grat work!

 


on Nov. 4 2011 at 7:46 pm
Truetothering_24 GOLD, Queens, New York
10 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Trust Nobody

Wow i can so relate so simple but says it all amzing x33

on Nov. 3 2011 at 9:40 am

wonderful poem

 


on Oct. 31 2011 at 7:09 pm
babigerl1194 PLATINUM, Margaretville, New York
23 articles 10 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
wat doesnt kill you only makes you stronger

A poem as simple as this yet so relatable is such great work!

on Oct. 31 2011 at 2:02 pm
Dancing4Jesus BRONZE, Oceanside, California
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Really describes summer :)... I'm new on here and definitely needs more views check out my work, constructive criticism is what I need to help me become a better writer! Thanks guys and gals!

on Oct. 29 2011 at 11:06 pm
stillheartless PLATINUM, Eugene, Oregon
40 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love you. I love you. I send this message through my fingers and into his, up his arm and into his heart. Hear me. I love you. And I'm sorry to leave you." -Jenny Downham

I cannot believe how well this explains last summer for me. This is trully stupendous.

Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 27 2011 at 9:53 pm
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

I love this so much... it's beautiful. If anyone has time would they mind checking out my poem... I'd sure appreciate it if you could! Please and thank you

on Oct. 25 2011 at 8:29 pm
EscapeSanity SILVER, Sahuache, Colorado
7 articles 1 photo 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Not all those who wander are lost
Is it better to be hurt by the raw truth, or comfortably deceived?

I love this poem! It relates to everyone and really gives the feeling of whats going on. I enjoyed this poem. :)

on Oct. 22 2011 at 7:36 pm
Belluna45 PLATINUM, Shelbyville, Kentucky
31 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Look after my heart- I've left it with you."
-Stephenie Meyer (Eclipse (Twilight #3))
"Either write something worth reading or do something wor
th writing."
-Benjamin Franklin
"A dishonest man you can always trust to be dishonest."
-Johnny Depp

Wow this is really great! It just shows how people change almost all the time.

on Oct. 18 2011 at 1:16 pm
RachaelSt BRONZE, Phoenix, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
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