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Cory's Eyes
August 22, 2014
I'm no good for you
Your no good for me
No one understood us honey
But now it doesnt matter
The walls shattered
No one to cover me
Your gone baby
CHORUS
Cory's eyes would keep me holdin' on
That someday all the hurt would be gone
Yeah everytime
I look in Cory's eyes
You vanished just like the wind blew you away
Now I'm countin' and prayin' everyday
And everything matters
Cuz the walls shattered
You tried to cover me
Now your gone and I can't believe
(chorus)
Oh Cory's eyes
Oh I wish I could find
I wish I could find
Cory's eyes
© Jamie U., West Hempstead, NY
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This article has 8 comments.
I love your inspiration (RIP Cory Montieth) and the perspective you decided to approach with this work. That being said, there are a few things I think you should keep in mind. 1. Your spelling. Edit and polish your spelling. Misspelling distorts the overall work. "Your" for "You're". Big difference. 2. Add a few more stanza or a few more lines. Emotion is here; but I think you can add to it. Of course, we don't know every detail of their relationship but a few things. Overall, I think you have a great start to a great song. Just add some substance and polish your spelling (punctuation for lyrics isn't vital). Nicely done.
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2014 at 9:30 pm
I love your song! I can wait to see the video of it, if you ever do post a vid let me no so i can watch.
lovelylaura BRONZE said...
on Sep. 2 2014 at 9:04 am
Thanks for viewing my songs! If you like my songs feel free to comment on them! I'd really like to know your opinions or tips or anything like that! Thanks :)
lovelylaura BRONZE said...
on Aug. 27 2014 at 12:16 pm
Thank you so much!!! :) I guess I should've posted the chorus each time instead of putting the repeats. Anyway, your comment was so sweet! :)
Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Aug. 26 2014 at 10:21 pm
Wow! This is entirely outstanding!!! I love the perspectives you chose, and the emotion inside of these lines!!!! The only thing I would change (Nitpicking here) would be taking the chorus, and cop;y and pasting it below the word chorus, it would make for easier reading, but I don't mind flipping back and forth :) Other than that tennsy little detail, I found this amazing!!!! Keep up the good work, I look forward to seeing your work on here in the future ;)
lovelylaura BRONZE said...
on Aug. 26 2014 at 9:33 am
Thank you!!! :)
BThomas1313 SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2014 at 4:57 pm
Amazing!!! :D
I wrote this song about Cory Montieh and how he passed away. I wrote this song in the perspective of his girlfriend, Lea Michele. :)