A Long Way Down

February 5, 2013
By Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.


Shes a daydreamer shes not good for much. All she does is dream of what she could become. What she doesn't realize is without doin anything now. It'll all start crumbling down.





Chorus: Its a long way down when you're high up in the clouds. Its a painful fall when you're dreamin you've got it all. Its a slowly fading memory when you open your eyes and finally see. Its a long way down.







Now shes 23 starin out the window dreamin about tomorrow. She was just a girl but now shes grown. To scared to try to achieve what she wants. So she pretends shes the movie star shes watchin now. She pretends shes the singer on the radio right now. Her life is goin by fast she hasn't realized it yet the lesson that is. (repeat chorus)







She cant stop cryin now cause shes seen the truth. But she knows shes got somethin to prove. So she'll make that dream come true. (repeat chorus)


The author's comments:
This is my very first song so please go easy on me.But please comment and put what you think.

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on Mar. 15 2013 at 7:26 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

thanks :) i dont know if ill ever sing it but if i do ill let you know.

on Mar. 15 2013 at 5:24 pm
ash57999 SILVER, Pewaukee, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"A room without books is like a body without a soul" -Marcus Tullius Cicero

I love this song!  It flows nicely and the word choice is great! 5 stars (now I want to hear you sing it! ^^ )

Diana101 GOLD said...
on Mar. 8 2013 at 5:43 pm
Diana101 GOLD, Grove City, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"God's delays are not God's denials"

This was really good !  :)

Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 7 2013 at 6:07 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I think this poem speaks on behalf of the whole world. Very relatble. Wonderful.

on Feb. 23 2013 at 10:31 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

This is a good start - I'd fix the grammatical errors and then work on the melody a little. But the idea is really good and relatable.

on Feb. 17 2013 at 1:00 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

K. Thanks :)

on Feb. 17 2013 at 10:35 am
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
31 articles 20 photos 343 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

PIck a tune from a song you already know, then model your song after that. 

on Feb. 16 2013 at 10:13 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks. I'm still tryin to figure out the whole songwriting thing including the tune. Any tips?

on Feb. 16 2013 at 10:07 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

Really good, the tune was kinda hard to understand though. 

on Feb. 16 2013 at 3:28 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks :)  your work is really good too.

on Feb. 16 2013 at 3:23 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

I like this! I'd love to hear it to music, but even just from reading it I can tell that it is very good. :)

on Feb. 15 2013 at 10:19 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

thanks. :)

Soccer23 GOLD said...
on Feb. 15 2013 at 10:09 pm
Soccer23 GOLD, Rockton, Illinois
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Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength, while loving someone deeply gives you courage.
Lao Tzu

I loved it! 5 stars

on Feb. 15 2013 at 9:18 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

Thanks:)  I wasn't sure if it was good or not. 

on Feb. 15 2013 at 8:22 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I don't know much about how songs should sound (the rhythm) but your word choice and message was very powerful. Five stars!


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