Where did you go?

October 2, 2012
By ShannonLil99 GOLD, Ongar, Other
ShannonLil99 GOLD, Ongar, Other
10 articles 1 photo 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Why should I care what other people think of me? I am who I am. And who I wanna be.'


















- Avril Lavigne


Empty bottles and broken dreams,
Alcohol evades you it seems.
Tears, screams and schemes,
Stop and have some self-esteem.
Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

You can’t sit there all alone,
You’ve gotta get in the zone,
Don’t groan or moan,
You can’t stay stoned.

You can’t live on alcohol,
Come on boy, rock n roll
Drink, drugs and cigarettes,
You will have lots of debts

Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

Baby you were shocking,
When you were rocking,
Why are you stopping?

Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

Baby you were shocking,
When you were rocking,
Why are you stopping?

You can’t live on alcohol,
Come on boy, rock n roll
Drink, drugs and cigarettes,
You will have lots of debts

Where did the times go?
We used to walk through snow,
And were unstoppable

Take a look at you now,
Where did you go?
Where is the man I used to know?

Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

Baby you were shocking,
When you were rocking,
Why are you stopping?

You can’t live on alcohol,
Come on boy, rock n roll
Drink, drugs and cigarettes,
You will have lots of debts

Take a look at you now,
Where did you go?
Where is the man I used to know?



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on Oct. 22 2012 at 9:18 pm
Stella_Val_Illicia GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
13 articles 0 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the beginning, the universe was created. This has made a lot of people angry and been widely regarded as a bad idea."
--Douglas Adams

This is very beautiful, and would love to hear it sung. I think that the lyrics are wonderful, and I love the fact that you are addressing a major issue in modern society. Kudos!

on Oct. 15 2012 at 10:07 am
DarkWillow BRONZE, Cincinnati, Ohio
2 articles 3 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
I paint with words and create music of colors.

Ooh, I love this! I'd love to hear it as a song.

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on Oct. 13 2012 at 12:23 am
Kayshale_O, Lawrence, Massachusetts
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"I can only see my reflection......not my soul"









~Kayshale Ortiz

My favorite part was the last stanza because of its conclusive meaning. Overall the song looks good to me and it probably sounds good too. :) 

on Oct. 12 2012 at 11:00 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

this was pretty cool i really like the first stanza and the way you come to the message but if i were you  i'd try to stay away from some of those played out rhymes but seriously you got something really good here 

on Oct. 10 2012 at 10:37 am
AnthonyDavidHall PLATINUM, Valrico, Florida
23 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth." - Oscar Wilde

*sips unidentified liquid* Beware (and by beware, I mean eliminate) predictable rhymes. They make a piece come across more like a nursery rhyme than a rock song. Despite my own bad habits, I appreciate the sentiment behind this piece. However, it would benefit you to go back and cut the fatty cliches from the meat.

on Oct. 10 2012 at 6:24 am
Eowyngreen SILVER, Metamora, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't want to be forgotten, shortly after you are dead and rotten, either do something worth writing, or write something worth reading."
~Benjamin Franklin

So sorry it put out two!  I don't know how that happened!

on Oct. 10 2012 at 6:22 am
Eowyngreen SILVER, Metamora, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't want to be forgotten, shortly after you are dead and rotten, either do something worth writing, or write something worth reading."
~Benjamin Franklin

Wow, it's so nice to finally hear a song that's not promoting drugs and alcohol!!!  Thank you!  It's very nicely written, and if you can sing, please take this somewhere.  It is a message that needs to be spread, and it is very well done!  If you get time, could you comment on 'The Perfectionist' in my work? Thanks!

on Oct. 10 2012 at 6:22 am
Eowyngreen SILVER, Metamora, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't want to be forgotten, shortly after you are dead and rotten, either do something worth writing, or write something worth reading."
~Benjamin Franklin

Wow, it's so nice to finally hear a song that's not promoting drugs and alcohol!!!  Thank you!  It's very nicely written, and if you can sing, please take this somewhere.  It is a message that needs to be spread, and it is very well done!  If you get time, could you comment on 'The Perfectionist' in my work? Thanks!

on Oct. 6 2012 at 6:42 am
Scooby-Doo_ChinaC, Ongar, Other
0 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
'The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.'














- Eleanor Roosevelt

Love it! X


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