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Empty bottles and broken dreams,
Alcohol evades you it seems.
Tears, screams and schemes,
Stop and have some self-esteem.
Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

You can’t sit there all alone,
You’ve gotta get in the zone,
Don’t groan or moan,
You can’t stay stoned.

You can’t live on alcohol,
Come on boy, rock n roll
Drink, drugs and cigarettes,
You will have lots of debts

Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

Baby you were shocking,
When you were rocking,
Why are you stopping?

Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

Baby you were shocking,
When you were rocking,
Why are you stopping?

You can’t live on alcohol,
Come on boy, rock n roll
Drink, drugs and cigarettes,
You will have lots of debts

Where did the times go?
We used to walk through snow,
And were unstoppable

Take a look at you now,
Where did you go?
Where is the man I used to know?

Take a look at your life,
And wonder where did it go?
Do you know?
Come on baby, you’ve got to show

Baby you were shocking,
When you were rocking,
Why are you stopping?

You can’t live on alcohol,
Come on boy, rock n roll
Drink, drugs and cigarettes,
You will have lots of debts

Take a look at you now,
Where did you go?
Where is the man I used to know?



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DarkWillow said...
Oct. 15, 2012 at 10:07 am:
Ooh, I love this! I'd love to hear it as a song.
 
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Kayshale_O said...
Oct. 13, 2012 at 12:23 am:
My favorite part was the last stanza because of its conclusive meaning. Overall the song looks good to me and it probably sounds good too. :) 
 
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Behind_a_Plastic_Smile said...
Oct. 12, 2012 at 11:00 pm:
this was pretty cool i really like the first stanza and the way you come to the message but if i were you  i'd try to stay away from some of those played out rhymes but seriously you got something really good here 
 
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AnthonyDavidHall said...
Oct. 10, 2012 at 10:37 am:
*sips unidentified liquid* Beware (and by beware, I mean eliminate) predictable rhymes. They make a piece come across more like a nursery rhyme than a rock song. Despite my own bad habits, I appreciate the sentiment behind this piece. However, it would benefit you to go back and cut the fatty cliches from the meat.
 
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BucketFillerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 10, 2012 at 6:22 am:
Wow, it's so nice to finally hear a song that's not promoting drugs and alcohol!!!  Thank you!  It's very nicely written, and if you can sing, please take this somewhere.  It is a message that needs to be spread, and it is very well done!  If you get time, could you comment on 'The Perfectionist' in my work? Thanks!
 
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BucketFillerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Oct. 10, 2012 at 6:22 am:
Wow, it's so nice to finally hear a song that's not promoting drugs and alcohol!!!  Thank you!  It's very nicely written, and if you can sing, please take this somewhere.  It is a message that needs to be spread, and it is very well done!  If you get time, could you comment on 'The Perfectionist' in my work? Thanks!
 
BucketFillerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 10, 2012 at 6:24 am :
So sorry it put out two!  I don't know how that happened!
 
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Scooby-Doo_ChinaC said...
Oct. 6, 2012 at 6:42 am:
Love it! X
 
AthenaMarisaDeterminedbyFateThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 22, 2012 at 9:18 pm :
This is very beautiful, and would love to hear it sung. I think that the lyrics are wonderful, and I love the fact that you are addressing a major issue in modern society. Kudos!
 
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