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Babydoll

September 21, 2012
By kiskas2112 BRONZE, Cabin John, Maryland
kiskas2112 BRONZE, Cabin John, Maryland
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Don't breath too deeply
Don't think so hard
I know you like to be in command
But its breaking my porcelain heart

And you call me your baby doll
And you treat me like a toy
And it's alright as long as you always say you're sorry
All I want is to bring you joy

Broken like a baby doll
But I'll move on
And you play me like a puppet
But I'll stay strong
Just as long as when you leave
You tuck me in between the sheets
And kiss me right between the eyes
And say I love you baby girl forever

Cause you're barely even five feet away
But your miles from my heart
And I'm sitting up high all alone on this shelf
Collecting dust and scrapes and scars

And my painted eyes have always been dry
It's no accident they're blue
An my smiling lips have been sewn shut
So I'll never say i love you

Broken like a baby doll
But I'll move on
And you play me like a puppet
But I'll stay strong
Just as long as when you leave
You tuck me in between the sheets
And kiss me right between the eyes
And say I love you baby girl forever

There were times that you threw me down upon the floor
Tore me apart with words like knives
As if to settle scores

But at the end of the day
All I want to hear you say
Is I love you baby doll
As I watch you walk away

Broken like a baby doll
But I'll move on
And you play me like a puppet
But I'll stay strong
Just as long as when you leave
You tuck me in between the sheets
And kiss me right between the eyes
And say I love you baby girl forever



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on Nov. 24 2012 at 11:26 pm
Beautiful how you kept the metaphor going thru so full of emotion

on Sep. 25 2012 at 8:29 am
Photographywonder PLATINUM, Unfortunetly, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"You can't wait for inspiration to come to you, you have to go at it with a club"
"Can anything be sadder than work unfinished? Yes; work never begun"
"Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes.Art is knowing which ones to keep"-Scott Adams

I loved this poem so much! I love the feeling of it and how i can relate without knowing whats going on. I felt so drawn! Its amazing. Simply Amazing.

DeleteMe said...
on Sep. 22 2012 at 11:30 pm
DeleteMe, Nampa, Idaho
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I love it. :) Great work. It's sad, but it's not whiny or too dramatic. It's creative and different and it appeals to the reader both verbally and visually at the same time. I think your writing style could use some work, but other than that, you have some serious potential to be amazing. I don't know if you've ever heard of this song or not, but while I was reading this, I was thinking of it and I thought you'd like it - "I'm Your Puppet" by Gregory and the Hawk. You should look it up. Anyway, I appreciate you writing this poem. It's very good.

gfukes GOLD said...
on Sep. 22 2012 at 8:07 pm
gfukes GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes, if you stand on the bottom rail of a bridge and lean over to watch the river slipping slowly away beneath you, you will suddenly know everything there is to be known.”
-Winnie the Pooh

hey i really enjoyed your poem, liked your choice of words and structure