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amnesia

April 26, 2012
By MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
11 articles 0 photos 40 comments

What is my name?
Why am i here?
Am i insane?
Finally giving in to fear
How do i go on?
Do i ignore my past?
I am a pawn
Is it over at last?
Im so very tired
I dont know what to do
Diffrently my brain is wired
This is all very new
To all who care
Now i say goodbye
Dont even know where
Except to soar through the sky


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this is a rough draft

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on Jul. 31 2013 at 12:37 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

This is kinda choppy and blunt, but in a why, it's effective. Good thoughts, good be better grammar and stuff, but I'd give this a 4/5

on May. 3 2013 at 12:43 am
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

It's a good reaction to have. To make the transition stronger, use words that have to do with heights going from low to high, or low all the way to and contrast with he idea of flying. As a suggestion. You may think of something I've never thought of. You have some great ideas for your works!