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There’s a kind of golden glow when you’re around,
A halo hanging in the air,
Like the shining rose that powders the dusk,
Life seen through love, la vie en rose
The lights are spinning round and round,
Carousel that never ends,
Music rings out through the sky,
Spread its wings, life learns to fly.

But it’s gently slowing down,
Night is drawing to a close,
In a blink it’s disappeared,
As if it never had been there.

But if you’ll be my last dream,
You’ll be the one I remember,
The last thing I see,
When I open my eyes at the end of the night.
So be my last dream,
And I promise that you won’t regret,
The time that we spent together day, after day,
The feelings that came that came in the night, then drifted away,
So be my last dream.

Need something more permanent,
Something that can stay around,
Not a feeling like a bird,
That twists and turns before it lands,
Then you never see it again,
A piece is missing in your heart,
Be my guiding light, my friend,
My life, my love, my everything.

If you’ll be my last dream,
You’ll be the one I remember,
The last thing I see,
When I open my eyes at the end of the night.
So be my last dream,
And I promise that you won’t regret,
The time that we spent together day, after day,
The feelings that came that came in the night and then slipped away,
So be my last dream.

It’s all over,
Too soon it’s gone and lost,
Winter at night,
My heart is covered in frost.

But if you’ll be my last dream,
You’ll be the one I remember,
The last thing I see,
When I open my eyes at the end of the night.
So be my last dream,
And I promise that you won’t regret,
The time that we spent together day, after day,
The feelings that came that came in the night and then slipped away,
So be my last dream.
The last thing I see,
When I open my eyes at the end of the night.
So be my last dream,





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eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 22, 2011 at 11:35 pm
There are many gorgeous lines with beautiful imagery, but it sounds a bit too cliche to me.
 
ArtemisVale replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 10:03 am
I have to agree that, after re-reading the song, it is very cliché but it was written on a whim and, after all, so much has already been heard in music, that everything seems a bit cliché isn't it?
 
eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 11:55 am
Haha that's an interesting idea that everything's a bit cliche, but it sounds to me like that's just defensive. I think an artist's job is not only to create beautiful things but to be original. If you browse through even just the articles on TI, you can see works, including songs, that look at things from new perspectives or discuss unusual topics instead of just being cliche. I think if you spent a little more time on this you could make it meaningful.
 
ArtemisVale replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 1:18 pm
Sorry I didnt mean to sound defensive :p Its just my first time getting a strangers pov on my writing and I know it's not perfect...I guess it's just in my nature to argue...but I'll definitely take on board what you said. Just the fact that you comment on my work means a lot to me. So thanks :)
 
eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 1:32 pm
No worries. It's brave of you to post your work; keep writing and putting it on TI! I', also sorry if my comments are too harsh.
 
ArtemisVale replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 1:40 pm
No worries :) I need a little harshness, my family's the only ones who see my writing and they're always to nice. By the way, if you don't mind me asking, how old are you? Pure curiosity ;)
 
eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 1:49 pm
Sorry, I don't feel comfortable publicly posting information online about myself.
 
ArtemisVale replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 1:56 pm
Sure no problem. I understand. It was simply out of curiosity.
 
OneofThem This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 22, 2011 at 7:03 pm
Hm...as a poem, I read it once and was like, "this is super cheesy." But as a song, I think it's quite beautiful. :) Good job.
 
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