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Love You To Death

October 20, 2010
By wefellinLAVA PLATINUM, Copper Cliff, Other
wefellinLAVA PLATINUM, Copper Cliff, Other
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Favorite Quote:
'you touched my heart, through it's shell'


I remember a time when all was bright
when no one said a word someone else didn't like
the point of living was not to get ahead
but to be in love, have friends, and be accepted
i swear there was a time when i did not lie
i never said a word someone else didn't like
my life had a rythym, beating and wild
i'd yet to meet love, i was still alive

to love is to die
to love is to die

it's always at night that i think of the light
wanting, missing, holding you tight
i swear it's the only time i've felt alive
you're gone...

to love is to die
to love is to die
i want to be alive
to love is to die
bring me to life
as i die, as i die

i remember a time when all was bright
i looked to the sky on a beautiful night
admiring the moon, i wished for love
wishes never come through, they're never enough
but this time i died of love
to love is to die



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AshTree SILVER said...
on Nov. 14 2010 at 4:17 pm
AshTree SILVER, Clarksville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Live your art" -made this one up myself. Simple, but true.

I really like this poem. You did a good job with it and I like the story behind it

on Nov. 10 2010 at 7:39 pm
NeverCaredForKool-Aid GOLD, Elkridge, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in hell but I believe in my parent's couch-- Watsky

I liked...

-  how this told a story rather than simply explaining a concept like most poems do.  It made this seem much deeper.

-  the rhyming felt very natural, not forced.

I didn't like...

-  how this really was just telling a story.  There wasn't much emotion is it, the speaker didn't seem to have many feelings.  I wanna feel her pain, her sorrow, that would make this much more personal or relatable.

-  I also wish you would've explained more on how love is death.  Again, I'm wondering, is it the feeling or what?

Overall...  Nice poem with a good flow, but I'd like to get to know the speaker more- why they say what they say.