Black Gold MAG

January 16, 2010
By JnAkers BRONZE, Roanoke, Virginia
JnAkers BRONZE, Roanoke, Virginia
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Toxic gains
Economic raise
Society's dying rage.

Collapse of the system
End of the line
Black gold
In our bank tonight

False truths
False lies
Monetary suicide
Make a withdrawal tonight

Unexpected crash
– bull sh** –
Been in the plan
Since time began

Toxic gains
Economic raise
Society's dying rage.

Illness of the sand
From the Pharaoh
To the serfs
of the land

False gold
False gods
Devils among us
High within the hierarchy

Commercial Treason
The outsourcing of man
All his talents
Undermined

Toxic gains
Economic raise
Society's dying rage.

Talent show of greed
Show your best
Gotta be wealthier than the rest.
This is our creed
Blown aside and we die
Diluted Insides
Overblown effect
Straight from our media outlet

No funding
Lack of expense
Commercialism dead till the end
End of the world

Toxic gains
Economic raise
Society's dying rage.


The author's comments:
What inspired to write this.. i was just sitting down the other day and my thoughts warndered to current economic situtions. and this is what i came up with. Please Comment

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on May. 6 at 3:04 pm
AllTheSuperRacehorses SILVER, Haverford, Pennsylvania
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Unbelievable! So few people take the time to write about something other than themselves, and not only did you take the time to do that, you executed it beautifully.

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on Feb. 28 2014 at 8:49 am
misfitsquuen, Easley, South Carolina
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i love the name of it and its really good

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on Oct. 21 2012 at 8:56 pm
Katie-jo, Triangle, Virginia
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Everyone else who has commented seems to love this, but...eh, personally, I can't really see this as a song...you know? A poem, sure, but...nice variety of words, though, and interesting rhymes...

on Oct. 21 2012 at 2:52 pm
silvermist999 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
If you love something, let it go. If it comes back, it's yours. If it doesn't, it never was and it's not meant to be.

I love this it explains things really well..

on Aug. 17 2012 at 9:26 pm
unicornparty7, Bronx, New York
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this is beautiful

on Jul. 28 2011 at 3:06 am
zacklhughes BRONZE, Junction City, Kansas
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This is powerful. extremely potent. keep it up.

on Mar. 22 2011 at 2:30 pm
callie15 BRONZE, North Plains, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"I dreamed I was a butterfly, flitting around in the sky; then I awoke. Now I wonder: Am I a man who dreamt of being a butterfly, or am I a butterfly dreaming that I am a man?"
-Chuang Tzu

"No man with a good car needs to be justified!"
-Wise Blood

and i also like the lines being short. it gives the poem a rhythm.

on Mar. 22 2011 at 2:26 pm
callie15 BRONZE, North Plains, Oregon
3 articles 21 photos 424 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I dreamed I was a butterfly, flitting around in the sky; then I awoke. Now I wonder: Am I a man who dreamt of being a butterfly, or am I a butterfly dreaming that I am a man?"
-Chuang Tzu

"No man with a good car needs to be justified!"
-Wise Blood

i like the fact that it isn't a topic most people write poetry about. it's a lot easier to write poems about love and nature than about the economy. amazing job! brava!

on Jan. 22 2011 at 7:35 pm
RisingMomoM.R. SILVER, Georgetown, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
i think of experiences and images...as being stored in the rootcellar of my mind, hibernating in the dark in the dark until they are ready for stories.
-Daniel Keyes

this is flipping gooooooooooooood! keep writing!

on Dec. 9 2010 at 12:28 am
akwolfchick SILVER, Anchorage, Alaska
6 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Most of what people think and believe and a lot of their quotes comes from what others have said. Funny thing is is that I think I'm the only one who's said this".

WOW! that is really good

on Sep. 11 2010 at 8:27 pm
GodStrongKid PLATINUM, Parkville, Missouri
20 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about.

O.0 nice job! Amazing talent.

on Jul. 30 2010 at 8:42 pm
BlueInk94 PLATINUM, Valley Park, Missouri
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I like ho u used three lines repeatedly throughout the poem. it gave it emphasis. i aslo love the ay you placed and paired ords to better portray your message. It was hard not to understand the significance. well done!

on Jun. 6 2010 at 9:05 pm
bEaUt3yWiThIn BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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i agree with alll but i would like to add that your talents is amazing

on May. 5 2010 at 8:26 am
FateshiddenWriter GOLD, Williamsburg, Virginia
16 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
if i were the rain could i ever merge with someones heart like the way rain merges with the sky and earth- BLEAH QUOTE

i agree with them both..

=]

 

 


on Apr. 10 2010 at 7:40 pm
JamminJos23 GOLD, Sandy, Oregon
11 articles 2 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Stand up for what is right, even if you are standing alone.

This is really good :)

on Feb. 2 2010 at 8:11 am
IgniteTheAirwaves PLATINUM, New City, New York
41 articles 37 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't ever tell anybody anything. If you do, you start missing everybody." -J.D. Salinger, Catcher in the Rye

I like that you obviously thought about the lyrics before you wrote them. Good work, and I respect that your lyrics aren't about love or desire.


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