Whirlwind

November 6, 2009
By Miss_Bliss GOLD, Waban, Massachusetts
Miss_Bliss GOLD, Waban, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"If we did all the things we were capable of, we would literally astound ourselves."

-Thomas Edison


[First verse]
Standing around as time goes by,
Killers born and lovers die.
Bombs are dropped right out of the sky,
Children laugh while adults cry.

Living on a dream that you can't see,
Trying to become what others need you to be.
Feeling trapped in your body,
Is living life life's special fee?

CHORUS:
You may stop, the world will go.
The sky is high, and the tide is low.
The world around you pitches and rolls,
And the stars don't care...

[Second verse]
Working out what's real within life's din,
Knowing where you're going, but not where you've been.
Underweight people can't believe they're thin,
And when on Earth, in Earth, do you win?

CHORUS:
You may stop, the world will go.
The sky is high, and the tide is low.
The world around you pitches and rolls,
And the stars don't care...

BRIDGE:
People starve, the Earth will die.
Families fight and everyone lies.
Don't you ever wish you could fly far away, for a day?

CHORUS:
You may stop, the world will go.
The sky is high, and the tide is low.
The world around you pitches and rolls,
And the stars don't care...


The author's comments:
Okay... I wrote the first half of this to ease my boredom on a road trip, and the second half in the shower... Any comments are welcome, as this is my first real attempt at a song and I'm not sure how this has turned out (when read by people other than myself).

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Monkey13 said...
on Nov. 24 2009 at 5:13 pm
This is ABSOLUTELY fantstic, Celina! I'm soooooooooo impressed. Especially for a first song, girl! I have one comment: on the last verse, instead of "can't" maybe "won't", if you care. I think it's completely wonderful. Keep it up!

on Nov. 24 2009 at 1:42 pm
Miss_Bliss GOLD, Waban, Massachusetts
17 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If we did all the things we were capable of, we would literally astound ourselves."

-Thomas Edison

Thanks!!!!! It actually IS a song, with a crappy piano accompaniment (because I'm bad at writing music) and a tune...

achaparala said...
on Nov. 24 2009 at 1:38 pm
I LOVE this one, Celina! I think it's your best poem by far. And I like how it's formatted more like a song than a poem, it gives it more character.




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