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Numb Now

eyeliner in the form of tear drops listen to the clock as it goes tic toc as another heartbreaks watch the cigarette smoke as it fills the room and alcohol fumes cover me like tattoos as another heart breaks

Chorus
Well i say you don't know the pain you say you feel the same well i say you don't feel s***

verse 2
Well i've been stuck in my ways yea i've been stuck for more than days but i'm trying to make a change yea i know you heard it all way before but here i stand a broken looking at these broken plans and all i wanted to do was take your left hand but jesus christ i'm so tried of all the fights so if you don't wanna leave i'll pack my things and be on that first flight

chorus
well i say you don't know the pain and you say you fell the same but i say you don't fell s*** no you dont fell s*** well i don't fell s*** anymore



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Lana15 said...
Mar. 28, 2012 at 10:31 pm:
I like this! Its honest!
 
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RitaRules said...
Dec. 7, 2011 at 1:14 pm:
I would've enjoyed this if it wasn't depressing. And if you actually capitalized some words.
 
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naruto freak said...
Oct. 26, 2011 at 2:14 pm:
why did you useso much swering like you used to much of the word s*** other than that it's good
 
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Proof said...
Oct. 26, 2011 at 12:27 pm:
this is a magnificent peice
 
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theunimaginable said...
Oct. 26, 2011 at 9:35 am:
This is just amazing. It just blows my mind how awesome this is :) Great job!!
 
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DanniTwin502 said...
Jun. 17, 2011 at 10:05 am:
I really like this! I love the lines with the "smoke like tattoos" and how you talk about wanting to change and also saying how if they can't leave you're more then willing to go! This is phenominal!
 
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KiyokoThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 4, 2011 at 11:34 pm:

I like this song, I think it has real potential. the line "alcohol fumes cover me like tattoos" is a great line. My only suggestion is to find a way to make your chorus stronger. Maybe have a really strong line in there, just to continue to keep the listeners attention through the piece. Good work!

 

 
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StarsandBrokenHearts said...
Oct. 20, 2010 at 5:17 pm:
wow i really love this! it's great!
 
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little~miss~sunshine said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 12:28 am:
i like this, it's edgy it reminds me of staind, do you listen to them?
 
musicislife This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 12, 2010 at 1:36 am :
thanks and somewhat
 
little~miss~sunshine replied...
Mar. 12, 2010 at 4:48 pm :
:)your welcome and yeah i like some of their songs
 
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kaiaray said...
Mar. 6, 2010 at 12:47 pm:
this is goo i like it but what is it tryin too say to ppl
 
musicislife This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 12, 2010 at 1:35 am :
not really trying to say anything to people at all just stories of my life
 
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SidVicious said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 12:27 pm:
<3 this is awesome
 
musicislife This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 6:54 pm :
thanks ya i cant seem to top this one lol
 
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mellow_melon This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2010 at 10:17 am:
wow that was really good! i love it!
 
musicislife This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 18, 2010 at 3:50 pm :
thanks ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
 
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SoulSurvivor92 said...
Feb. 16, 2010 at 11:02 am:
I like this poem so much. Its so beautiful and full of emotion. Keep working.
 
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Liz_N11 said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 1:35 pm:
This reminds me of Green Day's lyrics
 
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daughter-of-calliope said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 5:19 pm:
i love this!!! its so deep and emotional!!! keep writing!!! :)
 
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