The Way You Smile

October 18, 2009
By lyricist PLATINUM, West Pittston, Pennsylvania
lyricist PLATINUM, West Pittston, Pennsylvania
27 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
" How dare you give them so much power"


I stare at you
From across the room
I see the sparkle in your eyes

I smile at you
You turn your head
You stare into my eyes

And I see you smile

Its in the way I look at you
Its in the way I smile
Its in the way I talk to you
Its in the way I try
I try to be next to you
Try to be close to you
Try to be with you

Its the simplest truth you ever heard
I love you

I hold your hand
Walking down the street
I feel the sparks
I feel the heat

Its like a fire in my soul
I could dance all night
I could smile

I could do this forever

Its in the way I look at you
Its in the way I smile
Its in the way I talk to you
Its in the way I try
I try to be next to you
Try to be close to you
Try to be with you

Its the simplest truth you ever heard
I love you

And late at night
You hold me close
You whisper truths
Into my ear

We move to each others rythms
We are each others beats
And in the dark

I see you smile

Its in the way I look at you
Its in the way I smile
Its in the way I talk to you
Its in the way I try
Try to be next to you
Try to be close to you
Try to be with you

Its the simplest truth you ever heard
I love you

And no matter what life throw at us
Your still gonna be my number one
No one could ever replace
The butterflies

Or the way you smile


The author's comments:
So any of you who have read any of my other stuff know i dont normally write happy things. Well, shocking as it is, this one is happy. Though as normal it is dealing with love
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on May. 31 2012 at 8:25 pm
snowangel4427, Largo, Florida
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is it safeto post un published things will they be stolen

on May. 31 2012 at 8:25 pm
snowangel4427, Largo, Florida
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hey im new to this site is it ok to put my work here without it being copy witted or published will some one take it

 


on May. 9 2012 at 9:06 pm
imaginer BRONZE, Carlisle, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
A dream you dream alone is only a dream. A dream you dream together is a reality.

Your song is amazing. I loved it. It is beautiful and i could hear it in my head as I was reading. This should be a music video!

NLURHS BRONZE said...
on Mar. 26 2012 at 9:06 am
NLURHS BRONZE, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Destiny is no matter of chance. It is a matter of choice: It is not a thing to be waited for, it is a thing to be achieved." ~Unknown

I love your song I love the meaning behind it I love actually love to hear a song like this on the radio you're a wonderful lyricist.

on Dec. 29 2011 at 10:27 am
texmexgirl98 SILVER, Leavenworth, Kansas
9 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Who do you think you are ? Runnin round leavin scars, collectin your jar of hearts. Tearin love apart. Your gonna catch a cold... from the ice inside your soul. Dont come back for me. Dont come
back at all.

Well if this poem is under the song category, it should rhyme every once in a while. Like i said before, this is a great poem but should be under free verse not song.I do agree that the metaphors arent the best and grammar could be improved. Its a great poem, not so great of a song.

mr.fingers said...
on Dec. 29 2011 at 12:54 am
mr.fingers, Mount Hood/ Parkdale, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Our only problem is spilt wine.

I'm a musician and I really didn't see a lack of metre to be a problem in this piece. I was able to snap to every line and apply a rhythm to it. And I don't see what you mean by "where the words should rhyme." No one said it has to rhyme. Some of the best lyrics don't. I think the issue with this piece is gramatical errors and unclear or cliche metaphors. But don't get me wrong; I like it.

on Dec. 7 2011 at 10:54 pm
texmexgirl98 SILVER, Leavenworth, Kansas
9 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Who do you think you are ? Runnin round leavin scars, collectin your jar of hearts. Tearin love apart. Your gonna catch a cold... from the ice inside your soul. Dont come back for me. Dont come
back at all.

And also, I'm sorry to say this but..... Your song doesn't seem to have flow to it. There isn't a definite rhythm of where the words should rhyme or anything. It seems like it would be more suitable under free verse. It's a really good poem..... But to me it seems like an ok song

on Dec. 7 2011 at 10:50 pm
texmexgirl98 SILVER, Leavenworth, Kansas
9 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Who do you think you are ? Runnin round leavin scars, collectin your jar of hearts. Tearin love apart. Your gonna catch a cold... from the ice inside your soul. Dont come back for me. Dont come
back at all.

I like it but I can't seem to find the beat or rythem. I write sad things as well but I also write happier stuff. You should check out some of my work. I think you would enjoy it. I love how simple your song is. Not overdone. Well done

on Nov. 15 2011 at 7:33 pm
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
32 articles 2 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about success; it's about significance.

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent.

Wow, this is incredible! I love the line "It's the simplest truth you ever heard, I love you." You're a great writer. Would you mind reading my song, "The You I Thought I Knew" or "What Are You Waiting For"?

on Nov. 15 2011 at 11:31 am
i would like to read more of these and you are a very good writer

on Sep. 10 2011 at 7:41 pm
parker_01 BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
2 articles 1 photo 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Oh. You were serious."
-Vampire Academy-
"Every little girl should be told she's pretty; even if she isn't."
-Marilyn Monroe-

Okay, wow! This was amazing. I'm actually looking for a song I could possibly use in the novel I'm writing and this is the PERFECT song. Would you mind if I use it? Of course, giving you credit. This is just.. So amazing. LOVE IT! 

on Aug. 19 2011 at 12:55 am
ThePeaceDaisy BRONZE, Albany, New York
4 articles 5 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Laundry is the only thing that should be separated by color.” - Unknown
I will change this every week!

this is really pretty

on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:22 pm
lyricist PLATINUM, West Pittston, Pennsylvania
27 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
" How dare you give them so much power"

Thank you! :) Are you serious about the capitol records thing? I do play the guitar (granted not very well) but im sure I could make something for you to hear. 

 


Cody1 said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 5:43 pm
Cody1, Anacoco, Louisiana
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That was amazing you could be the next big thing when if you create a demo you should let mw know i know people at capital records i might be able to get you a contract with them

 


on Jun. 14 2011 at 9:51 am
onesillybookworm BRONZE, Hogsmeade, Other
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"If you're halfway through hell, keep going"
Winston Churchill

do you have actual music to go with it because the lyrics were good :)

Footle BRONZE said...
on May. 1 2011 at 8:35 pm
Footle BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
We could attack the mayor with hummus?

i love the last lines being irreplaceble is amazing way to say i love you... it's great

on Apr. 9 2011 at 12:20 pm
gurlLOL101 BRONZE, Export, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
How YOU Doin'?

Amazing!!!

R.I.PDustin said...
on Feb. 24 2011 at 11:40 am
R.I.PDustin, Fort Totten, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
life is crazy

your pretty good i like it & yah i never write any happy poems i think dis one is amazing =D

Rita mi said...
on Jan. 11 2011 at 9:38 pm
omg this song is amazing, when i read it i could hear music, also it sounds like it from your heart <3

on Jan. 11 2011 at 5:14 pm
HisPurePrincess ELITE, Flemington, New Jersey
132 articles 33 photos 483 comments
love it, pretty, like something i'd write. you're probably better though.


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