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I stare at you
From across the room
I see the sparkle in your eyes

I smile at you
You turn your head
You stare into my eyes

And I see you smile

Its in the way I look at you
Its in the way I smile
Its in the way I talk to you
Its in the way I try
I try to be next to you
Try to be close to you
Try to be with you

Its the simplest truth you ever heard
I love you

I hold your hand
Walking down the street
I feel the sparks
I feel the heat

Its like a fire in my soul
I could dance all night
I could smile

I could do this forever

Its in the way I look at you
Its in the way I smile
Its in the way I talk to you
Its in the way I try
I try to be next to you
Try to be close to you
Try to be with you

Its the simplest truth you ever heard
I love you

And late at night
You hold me close
You whisper truths
Into my ear

We move to each others rythms
We are each others beats
And in the dark

I see you smile

Its in the way I look at you
Its in the way I smile
Its in the way I talk to you
Its in the way I try
Try to be next to you
Try to be close to you
Try to be with you

Its the simplest truth you ever heard
I love you

And no matter what life throw at us
Your still gonna be my number one
No one could ever replace
The butterflies

Or the way you smile



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snowangel4427 said...
May 31, 2012 at 8:25 pm:
is it safeto post un published things will they be stolen
 
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snowangel4427 said...
May 31, 2012 at 8:25 pm:

hey im new to this site is it ok to put my work here without it being copy witted or published will some one take it

 

 
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imaginer said...
May 9, 2012 at 9:06 pm:
Your song is amazing. I loved it. It is beautiful and i could hear it in my head as I was reading. This should be a music video!
 
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NLURHS said...
Mar. 26, 2012 at 9:06 am:
I love your song I love the meaning behind it I love actually love to hear a song like this on the radio you're a wonderful lyricist.
 
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texmexgirl98 said...
Dec. 7, 2011 at 10:54 pm:
And also, I'm sorry to say this but..... Your song doesn't seem to have flow to it. There isn't a definite rhythm of where the words should rhyme or anything. It seems like it would be more suitable under free verse. It's a really good poem..... But to me it seems like an ok song
 
mr.fingers replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 12:54 am :
I'm a musician and I really didn't see a lack of metre to be a problem in this piece. I was able to snap to every line and apply a rhythm to it. And I don't see what you mean by "where the words should rhyme." No one said it has to rhyme. Some of the best lyrics don't. I think the issue with this piece is gramatical errors and unclear or cliche metaphors. But don't get me wrong; I like it.
 
texmexgirl98 replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 10:27 am :
Well if this poem is under the song category, it should rhyme every once in a while. Like i said before, this is a great poem but should be under free verse not song.I do agree that the metaphors arent the best and grammar could be improved. Its a great poem, not so great of a song.
 
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texmexgirl98 said...
Dec. 7, 2011 at 10:50 pm:
I like it but I can't seem to find the beat or rythem. I write sad things as well but I also write happier stuff. You should check out some of my work. I think you would enjoy it. I love how simple your song is. Not overdone. Well done
 
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WritingLoverForever said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 7:33 pm:
Wow, this is incredible! I love the line "It's the simplest truth you ever heard, I love you." You're a great writer. Would you mind reading my song, "The You I Thought I Knew" or "What Are You Waiting For"?
 
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alexesmayberry said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 11:31 am:
i would like to read more of these and you are a very good writer
 
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Rare_Rose said...
Sept. 10, 2011 at 7:41 pm:
Okay, wow! This was amazing. I'm actually looking for a song I could possibly use in the novel I'm writing and this is the PERFECT song. Would you mind if I use it? Of course, giving you credit. This is just.. So amazing. LOVE IT! 
 
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LazyDaisyTheWriter said...
Aug. 19, 2011 at 12:55 am:
this is really pretty
 
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Cody1 said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 5:43 pm:

That was amazing you could be the next big thing when if you create a demo you should let mw know i know people at capital records i might be able to get you a contract with them

 

 
lyricist replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 9:22 pm :

Thank you! :) Are you serious about the capitol records thing? I do play the guitar (granted not very well) but im sure I could make something for you to hear. 

 

 
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onesillybookworm said...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 9:51 am:
do you have actual music to go with it because the lyrics were good :)
 
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Footle said...
May 1, 2011 at 8:35 pm:
i love the last lines being irreplaceble is amazing way to say i love you... it's great
 
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gurlLOL101 said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 12:20 pm:
Amazing!!!
 
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Rita mi said...
Jan. 11, 2011 at 9:38 pm:
omg this song is amazing, when i read it i could hear music, also it sounds like it from your heart <3
 
R.I.PDustin replied...
Feb. 24, 2011 at 11:40 am :
your pretty good i like it & yah i never write any happy poems i think dis one is amazing =D
 
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FireandWater This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 11, 2011 at 5:14 pm:
love it, pretty, like something i'd write. you're probably better though.
 
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