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Death swallows me whole,
Like the digestive ways of snake.
It doesn't bite you to warn you of what's coming,
Telling you of your terribly unlucky fate.

It only opens it's mouth and consumes you,
Bringing you to a world of complete emptiness.
Nothing to comfort you, only grief, sadness, and sorrow.
Though it's quick, the pain continues none the less.

Yes, death can be so cruel.
Chew you up, just to spit you out in agony.
Leaving you when you're most vulnerable,
Having you second guessing what you see.

Death is like a very long tunnel,
And at the end there is no light.
A journey of never ending darkness,
With nothing comforting in sight.




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dragonfly95 said...
Mar. 29, 2012 at 9:33 pm:
beautiful...you have great talent.
 
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RedDaisy said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 9:31 pm:

This poem holds a meaning for me, especially the end. I consider it anti-suicide. Death does not hold comfort, it holds only a dark and unescapable void. One only has but one chance at living a happy life: every step, every turn, every decision...it will lead to the essence of what has already been done. Beautifully written.

~RedDaisy~

 
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HuntressEmma said...
Nov. 10, 2010 at 6:25 pm:
Oh. My. God. This is really really good! It's so descriptive! Waiting for more!
 
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bkcrider92 said...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 10:37 am:
Wow this is so powerful! I can feel the emotion the whole time! If you get a chance can you check out my poem Memories and comment and rate it? i would love your opinion <3
 
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Mikayla Q. said...
May 14, 2010 at 11:18 pm:
this is really really good!! and aww i feal bad... but sometimes death dont have to be a bad thing, sometimes its good
 
Kairah027 replied...
May 15, 2010 at 2:55 pm :
Thanks sooo much for the comment :$ and ya your right sometimes it can be good <3
 
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BiancaMarie said...
May 13, 2010 at 6:18 pm:
this is great! you deff should keep wrighting! itss ahmazingg poem! <3 greatt work!
 
Kairah027 replied...
May 13, 2010 at 10:09 pm :
THANKS, SO MUCH :)
 
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♠♣♦♥Jon♠♣♦♥ said...
May 11, 2010 at 8:27 pm:
I really like this. That's how it seemed for me when I had my ex.. We were going for 6 months or so.. And everytime a fight occured it would always seem as if it was a never ending path.. Good work though.:) Keep them coming.:) Maybe, in my opinion, write a poem with your feelings on something. Maybe a current relationship or a past one. I don't know. Just something I'd write about.:)
 
Kairah027 replied...
May 11, 2010 at 9:31 pm :
THANKS :), AND YA I'M GOING TO WRITE BOUT MY PAST RELATIONSHIPS GOOD IDEA:) THANKS ALOT FOR THE SUGGESTION
 
♠♣♦♥Jon♠♣♦♥ replied...
May 12, 2010 at 9:01 am :
No problem. And while your writing, try using suspenseful techniques. Really grab your audience, and make them feel what it is your writing.:)
 
Kairah027 replied...
May 12, 2010 at 6:38 pm :
Okay, i'll keep that in mind while writing my current poem bout my past relationship. Oh, but a poem that i wrote about my now ex boyfriend just got posted so could you check that out for me and comment cause i was thinking of using that for style inspiration and wondering what i could improve on. Thanks :)
 
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Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 11, 2010 at 8:25 pm:
wow, i love this and the title is great-keep going!!!
 
Kairah027 replied...
May 11, 2010 at 9:28 pm :
Thanks you it means alot :)
 
Egyptian girl replied...
May 12, 2010 at 6:09 am :
UR welcome!!!
 
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***Rain*** said...
May 11, 2010 at 4:04 pm:

I know exacty how tis fels. THe whole deal. Amazing as usual. Love it. :) Five stars.

 

 

...wow i cant typ to sav my life...

 
Kairah027 replied...
May 11, 2010 at 6:46 pm :
I'm glad someone can relate :) Thanks <3 and lol :P
 
***Rain*** replied...
May 12, 2010 at 3:44 pm :
Your welcome. :)
 
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BoosflashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 8, 2010 at 1:17 pm:
I've never been swallowed whole by any thing but i get it. I love the rhyming scheme and I love the title-a good title is key to getting these people to tell you how they feel..
 
Kairah027 replied...
May 10, 2010 at 3:39 pm :
Lol, me neither I just watch a lot of discovery channel :P It was just a concept though thought it would be a dark idea to go with my dark topic of death. But i'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the advice (the title thing), greatly appreciated :)
 
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