Everyones a Critic

September 3, 2009
By Anonymous

I once was wandering in the dessert
When I came upon an elder,
He handed me his umbrella
And said I’d need it for the weather.

To him I paid no attention
For in his mind things were not sound,
It was when I gave it back and went my way
That the rain came pouring down.


The author's comments:
I love ironic endings.

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on Jun. 27 2013 at 1:44 pm
Jay-Wolf PLATINUM, Cedar Hills, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"The man who takes offense when offence is not intended is a fool
However the man who takes offence when it is intended is an even greater fool"
Ralph Waldo Emerson

wow my other comment got messed up on the spacing  

on Jun. 27 2013 at 1:40 pm
Jay-Wolf PLATINUM, Cedar Hills, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"The man who takes offense when offence is not intended is a fool
However the man who takes offence when it is intended is an even greater fool"
Ralph Waldo Emerson

I't good i don't know if you relized it, but this is an exelant metaphore for how we as teens react to advise from our elders, ending always the same          (oh and no one cares about the small grammer mistakes we all do it)

on Mar. 25 2012 at 8:12 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

i love the poem! it simple yet means something not all people tend to realize!

ps. please read  rate and comment on my work if you get the chance cus i would really appreciate it!


on Feb. 8 2011 at 5:16 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

it makes perfect sense, its just that they only give you one scoop at mcdonalds so i guess I'll have to find me another way to relate. All I got is a dollar.

on Nov. 16 2010 at 9:10 pm
Karamel PLATINUM, Gwinn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Clever people will recognize and tolerate nothing but cleverness." -Anonymous

Hey, no problem. The way I always remembered the correct spelling of 'dessert' was because there are two 's's in it and you usually don't have one Scoop of ice cream, you have two Scoops of ice cream for dessert. Does that make sense? Probably not - I'm not very good at explaining things. But anyway, would you check out my work, too, please? Thank you! :D

on Nov. 6 2010 at 5:04 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

actually, i dont know the spelling difference between desert and dessert. and i didnt really know about that other thing either....(ironic.)who knew? i named it this because of the whole idea of being in the desert and it starts raining out of nowhere.merci for the comment. i love you captain.

on Nov. 5 2010 at 3:12 pm
Karamel PLATINUM, Gwinn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Clever people will recognize and tolerate nothing but cleverness." -Anonymous

I agree with you about the ending! The title was clever, too. You must've known that people would criticize you for pointing out that you spelled desert wrong and that the title word 'everyone's' is supposed to have an apostrophe between the e and s at the end... ;)

on Jun. 28 2010 at 9:06 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

well ofcoursly, its just standoutable.

on Jun. 28 2010 at 2:05 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

oh haha. yeah....but almost every girl kinda is, so i dont feel that dorky bout it:P

on Jun. 28 2010 at 1:42 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

merci captain.

on Jun. 28 2010 at 1:42 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

thank you captain. yopu really came out of nowhere.

on Jun. 28 2010 at 1:37 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

i remeber you saying you were a hopeless romatinc.....

on Jun. 28 2010 at 12:35 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

umm i actually dont rem wat it was or wat it couldve been. lol but i wrote the poem called 'im moving on' if u remember- cuz i rem u commented on that one

on Jun. 27 2010 at 12:48 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

i that appreciate captain. what was your name other?

on Jun. 26 2010 at 10:29 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

oh i rem u. my name may be diff so u mite not rem me. but i gotta say, this limerick is SOOOO flippin awesome!!!! its totally creative!!!!!! u definitely definitely hav a kool intelligent mind. -to hav come up with this. i loove it

on May. 14 2010 at 8:37 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

(Author) I dont know if its not obvious already but I'm the author of this poem. If anyone reads this can you please check out my other work? i would really love the feedback. thanks!

on Apr. 21 2010 at 6:23 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

yeah but you mean ironic. the poem is ironically written but the poem is not ironically. that's like saying you are happily and not happy. I wanted to write a poem that was really ironic-so thanx.

teddyd said...
on Apr. 21 2010 at 1:14 pm
is ironically a word cuz that is what this is and its really good 2  :-)

on Apr. 14 2010 at 8:13 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

thank you, I try my best.

Meghanxo said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 11:50 am
Meghanxo, Saugus, Massachusetts
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haha the ending was really ironic, i liked it.




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