Winter Morn MAG

By Collin B., Flower Mound, TX

     on a lovely winter’s morn

not a leaf or twig or thorn

could poke up past the icy sheet

or through the overlying sleet.

so, comfortably we walk barefoot

on a footprint path inside the wood

we worry not of rocks or stones

for our blanket keeps our heels alone.

in our eyes a glare of light

flies up from the sea of white

and clumps of snow snug in the trees

substitute for fallen leaves.

in the distance breezes start to blow

spinning leaves and swirling snow

we stand steadfast, release all fear

we simply hold the other near.

sharp wind rises all the sudden

and out from us a breath and shudder

though the chill makes our ears feel worse

my hand still warmly rests with yours.





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i love this so much!

This is so true. Your great at writing. :)

on May. 5 2015 at 12:09 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

(Dang it, the rest of my reply was deleted.) This is the best quote ever. A couple of years ago I attempted to write a poem about a snowstorm and an identity crisis. Needless to say, it wasn't quite at par because 1) I live in Texas and 2) I've never been through a situation in which I lost my own self. I must confess that your poem beats mine by far. In addition, your use of a limerick in a non-humorous situation is SO clever. When authors use limericks to describe something that is not meant to be comedic, it creates this whole moody tone that I absolutely adore. Keep up the good work!

on May. 5 2015 at 12:06 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

"clumps of snow snug in the trees substitute for fallen leaves."

on Dec. 2 2014 at 8:02 pm
LifeLeader PLATINUM, Roanoke, Virginia
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Your use of tyle and rythm is perfect! I love the description as well and every part connects perfectly and logically. I love it!

on Sep. 27 2014 at 2:33 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Oh, wow. I love this poem. You have such a talent and greatness in you; believe that, because you do. You really do. Your poem has so much, emotion and you in it. It's absolutely, wonderful. Thank you so much, for sharing this. Also, congrats on having this published. You deserve it. Thank you again. 

on Mar. 2 2013 at 9:14 am
MariahPotter PLATINUM, Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
“We dream in our waking moments, and walk in our sleep.” -scarlett letter

I agree. It was very delcious. ^_^ I thought it was beautiful, nice work <3

Fred said...
on May. 2 2012 at 10:35 am
Good poem I really liked the use of hyperbole.

on Apr. 27 2012 at 9:48 am
DoubleD_Money7 BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"In three words i can sum up everything i've learned about life: It goes in." -Tony Weaver

awsome it was delicious

Tyler Phan said...
on Apr. 27 2012 at 9:36 am
Tyler Phan, Grandville, Michigan
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sweetnessssss

Phoenix. said...
on Mar. 1 2012 at 7:37 am
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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this is really good i liked it it has a good rhythm and i can tell you worked hard on it 5/5 :)

Tremendous said...
on Dec. 29 2011 at 8:35 am
I absolutely enjoyed this! Your description is really good and smooth flowing. Don't get me started on how sweet and seemingly genuine the ending is. AMAZING job keep it up! and please consider checking my work out as well!

EllieHeart said...
on Dec. 13 2011 at 5:53 pm
EllieHeart, Tempe, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Pay no attention to what the critics say; no statue has ever been erected to a critic."










~Jean Sibelius

Really, really good! Would you mind taking a look at my poem Siren Lies? Thanks!

pupet master said...
on Nov. 3 2011 at 9:21 am

great article... i realy liked it

 


on Jul. 16 2011 at 10:56 am
Wildflower30 SILVER, Kolkata, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Create your own sayings, for only then do they make sense most. ---- Me

Imagery. I mean, WOW! This is so... enchanting!

spiria BRONZE said...
on Jan. 15 2011 at 11:42 pm
spiria BRONZE, Fullerton, California
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Beautiful Imagery. Marvelous Rhymes. Simply Fantastic.

on Dec. 26 2010 at 8:32 pm
Zazawish777 GOLD, KC, MO, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
life isn't passing me by, it's trying to run me over!

i too agree. this is amazing.

on Nov. 16 2010 at 8:05 pm
swiftheart GOLD, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If someone were to pay you 10 cents for every kind word you ever spoke and collect 5 cents for every unkind word, would you be rich or poor?"

marvelous poem. i was most captured by your poetic abilities and rhyme.

greek_wings said...
on Oct. 8 2010 at 1:32 pm
Marvelous poem! It was very sweet and captured the details perfectly! Excellent work!

JuStMe.DeZZi said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 4:35 pm
JuStMe.DeZZi, NA, Other
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Awesome! I really love this poem, the rhymes are unforgettable!




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