Aquas

Water is serene,
a palace of marine life
beating endless sand.






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hwoodruff98This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 9 at 9:32 am
This is almost water-like in its flow and feeling of gentle peace. That being said, the last line isn't five syllables, so it's not technically following the 5/7/5 structure of a haiku. If you took out the word "the" from the last line, it would be perfect. Other than that, really great piece!
 
WolfWhisperer0911This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
today at 10:53 am
@hwoodruff98 Thank you for your comment! :)
 
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