natural love

January 22, 2016
By Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P


this bright blue feeling

 

never could it be my heart

 

 

only cloudless skies.


The author's comments:

I wish I could say this was incredibly deep... a person in chat wanted an example of a haiku, so I wrote one.

 

I guess it is a little deep, since I wanted to compare some feelings I have for people with all those lovely photos of the sky on my tumblr...


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on Feb. 11 2016 at 9:21 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

Thank you very much. I'm really glad you enjoyed this!

on Feb. 11 2016 at 9:20 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

Aww, thank you so much! ;u; I did my best.

on Feb. 11 2016 at 1:00 am
PresCocoRain GOLD, Montgomery, Alabama
17 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
You don't have to burn books to destroy a culture. Just get people to stop reading them.
-Rad Bradbury

Yay! This is actually a haiku. There are some Teenink articles that say they are haikus, but then they turn out to have too many syllables, or they are not in that 5-7-5 style. This also hurts me (in a good way) because I can relate to this in my life right now. I'm having problems with like love in general, especially with expressing my feelings in poems and music and stuff. But seeing this has made me release, and now I feel confident that I can start doing what I love again. It's funny how you didn't try to make it really deep, but it turned out really deep for me. That just shows how much of a good writer you really are Allen. :)

on Feb. 10 2016 at 10:29 pm
guard-girl GOLD, Clover, South Carolina
10 articles 11 photos 148 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Trust in the Lord with all your heart, and do not depend on your own understanding. Seek His will in all you do, and he will show you which path to take."
Proverbs 3:5-6

I'm impressed, especially since you did not intend for it to be deep and thought-provoking. It is. It makes me think especially about regular problems a teenager faces, like homework, parents, clubs, no time, grades, etc. and the loss of childhood. I applaud you for writing this! :)

on Feb. 9 2016 at 9:17 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

The line spacing was an accident, but thank you ; u ; Your support means a lot to me

on Feb. 8 2016 at 2:51 pm
writer-violist DIAMOND, Jenks, Oklahoma
63 articles 4 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.”
― Maya Angelou, I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings

Wow! I think that this haiku is great! I agree that haikus can be difficult to write because of the limited number of syllables. I really like what you compare in this haiku, it is so lovely, yet deep in a great way. Is the line spacing supposed to be spaced that way? I'm just wondering because the first one has one space and after the second line there is two spaces. If you did it to express pauses in your writing or any other way, that is such a great idea! The imagery is great too! You are a really good writer! Please keep writing, I'd like to see more, and God bless! :)

on Jan. 27 2016 at 8:46 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

I agree, it's really hard to word haiku... But I'm working hard to improve, and soon I'll be much better! Thank you so much for reading.

on Jan. 27 2016 at 8:40 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it, and hopefully I can publish more soon.

on Jan. 27 2016 at 3:29 pm
Queen_of_Mediocrity BRONZE, Houston, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't know where you are going, any road will get you there." -The Cheshire Cat

This perfectly expresses the feelings I think we all get when we look at the sky, ever changing in color and clouds. The only thing is that line 2 is a little strangely worded, but it is a haiku so that makes it harder. Nice job. :)

Sonder said...
on Jan. 27 2016 at 2:39 pm
Sonder, Wattpad, Other
0 articles 0 photos 32 comments
Euphoria and gratitude beautifully weaved together in the shape of a well-executed haiku.


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