dying flames

October 22, 2013
By TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
13 articles 1 photo 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.

You are only as strong as your weakest link.


Last night burned, and we
burned with it – in the morning:
only ashes left.


The author's comments:
There's not always a phoenix ready to be reborn.

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Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 9 2014 at 5:18 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

As usual of myself, I'm drawn to titles: so the title for this poem initially grasped my curiousity. I will say it felt slightly choppy with the "-in the morning: only ahses left" part. But I knew what you were saying. I think it might benefit from extending the piece just a little more. Maybe not a long poem. But playing with the image. I love the concept. Well done. 

on Mar. 22 2014 at 1:55 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

SKY! ARE YOU INSANE?!!WEll I'll comment on the poem later but first I read Ray--yo's comment and I was confused so I opened your profile and focused on the About <name> part. NO WAY. YOU MUST REALLY not believe that. It is not true. AND I am getting really sentimental here. Please don't ever believe that. AND you must tell me that you read this when you do okay! Secondly I have missed reading your stuff. Post more soon? Pleeeeaaasee. AND THIS: This is just. Well when you said Phoenix made me think of Fawkes and his song. And then the poem was sad. But somehow without your explanation it seemed fiery and fierce and I somehow overlooked the sad part. But then this Haiku has so many aspects to it and that is always what I adore about your writing. I've missed you. LIKE HELL. Love always, Saphira.

on Jan. 26 2014 at 5:31 am
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)
"I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right." -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, "The Book Thief"

Maintaining precision while also making a point is not always an easy job, but you nailed it. Kudos! I love (and I almost never use this word) your name, and I totally can relate to your description of yourself. And I may be half a world away but I like you, so maybe change that particular line? And I'd appreciate it a lot if you commented on some of my works. Thanks!


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