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Breaking the Rules

Following is best,
but not always obeying
the rules that come in .



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Luv4EverThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 8 at 4:57 pm
simple yet conveys alot in the limited form of haiku^^
 
tori-gurlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 14, 2013 at 6:38 pm
I think it is awesome that you write Haikus, this is something I don't have much experience in but I will try to give some feedback :D I think that you should add some more haikus so that you can further develop your overall ideas. Right nor I feel like the poem is underdeveloped (I am used to writing free-verse poems though) The idea of your poem is one worth pursuing though. I feel like the experience needs to be further illustrated. "But not always obeying the rules that come in"... (more »)
 
vegangirl0725 said...
Aug. 1, 2013 at 3:53 pm
I love your Haiku, my only suggestion is to add more haikus in this poem.
 
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