i will save you

June 24, 2013
By Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas


you are a tragic
story that i can't help but read
and try to fix


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I think that this pretty much explains itself

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on Apr. 1 2015 at 2:53 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

@Laugh-it-Out I AM JUST POSTING THIS HERE because I know I've been gone. Just plain gone for ages now and I just, I MISS YOU. SO MUCH. It is like I had this amazing friend in you and all of you people and I haven't been able to reach out and it sucks and I just had to come back at least once and say this, that I miss you and I hope that you still remember me. Before I go and leave TeenInk. And well, here's an address: dua.jas (attherateof) hotmail

on Sep. 15 2013 at 10:40 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 659 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

This poem is inspiring--I might write a poem in response to it. It makes me think about both sides of this situation, even though you only share one side.

on Jul. 20 2013 at 2:59 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

This reminds me of the additude I have to stop myself from adopting. I constantly just need to remind myself that I cant fix everyone, and just because some quality isnt the best, dosent mean it must be fixed. I am that overhelpful, opinionated person that everyone knows.

on Jul. 11 2013 at 7:07 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

I really like this :) i'm a huge fan of haikus and this is probably the best i've read!  

on Jul. 2 2013 at 12:17 pm
Cassie1435 GOLD, Skokie, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Doctor, our insanity is not that we see people that aren't there. It's that we ignore the ones who are."
Andrea Gibson

short simple and to the point i love it !

on Jul. 1 2013 at 8:09 am
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

haha, you make the person you're adressing sound very pitiful. But that was pretty good writing, while not all that extraordinary.  Could you take a look at some of my work if you can?

on Jun. 29 2013 at 11:54 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Oh Liv, everytime you make me thank back lol :P You are just SO sweet! Love ya. Mwuah!! 

on Jun. 28 2013 at 9:13 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

So true. I mean in someways, i wrote this as every bit for myself as for anyone else, because bad things happen to the best and all of us. And trust me you are not alone :) thanks as usual McKay :)

on Jun. 28 2013 at 9:10 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Thanks Lisa!! Anything new of ours you want me too look at?

on Jun. 28 2013 at 9:09 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Thanks for the suggestion Callie. I live honest feedback :) thanks!

on Jun. 28 2013 at 9:08 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Thanks Dua. That really means a lot coming from such an amazing haikuer as yourself! :)

on Jun. 28 2013 at 9:08 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Lex-loo! You crack me up, really! I thought it was hilarious how you greater this comment with "Livy-loo" i see you have been paying attention to my poetry ;) Haha. Thanks. I am also not a huge haikuer. I find them difficult to write, and if they are not done well, i find them utterly pointless. But I am experimenting sooo. Thanks! :))

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on Jun. 28 2013 at 4:10 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I think we all know someone like this. H*ll, we all are tragic stories. At least, I know I am. Though not overly tragic. I like the metaphor or reading someone. Well done, Liv. And the lowercase of everything work really well for this poem.

on Jun. 26 2013 at 8:52 pm
BalladOfMonaLisa PLATINUM, Na, Other
24 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love and to be loved; to hurt and to be hurt. These are the ideals that make up humanity. ~Me (Lisa)

Awesome as usual! :) I love how it holds soooo much meaning in so few words

on Jun. 26 2013 at 8:48 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I like the metaphor of a person being a book and "reading them" :) I think you could have changed "fix" to make it fit the theme a little better, if you know what I mean, but I don't know, I still really liked it. Good job!

on Jun. 26 2013 at 3:27 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

This is just WoW! Liv, this is breathtaking. I love love love the feel of this Haiku. I don't know what else to say because I truly am out of words. Just wowed me. 

on Jun. 25 2013 at 10:39 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Livy-Lo! You know I'm not a 'haiku-er', but I still enjoy reading them! I enjoyed the simplicity of it, though I suppose that's the point of a haiku, to get a point across in a few short words. With that being said, you are very good at haikus. You are able to write something meaningful in only three lines, so bravo. I love the title, totally appealing. I love the whole 'reaching out to help' feel to it. I really like it. There's always that one person we find and can't help but be enraptured by. They have something to them that pulls us in and says, 'I need you.' And our hearts can't help but agree. Great job, Liv!


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